Story: 9/10. What an interesting little bit of canon to turn into a story! I like the angle of two brothers making different choices.

Characters: 9/10. You know, I often say that I don't see the point in writing incredibly shortfic about original characters, but you've managed to make them interesting in the words that you have. It would probably be improved if you described their individual personalities a bit more, but you still do a pretty good job.

Creativity: 9.25/10. As I've said before, excellent idea for a story.

Writing: 8.25/10. Your writing isn't really as good in this story as in the other one, though I think that other reviewer was a bit ** you. The fic is dialogue heavy and could use a bit more description, but what description you DO use is poignant.

Believability: 9.25/10. I think that part of what makes this fic so attractive is its believability; the idea that this situation must have happened many times in Narnia during these years.

Overall: 9/10. A good idea for a story and you carry it out well, making a shortfic about two OCs interesting. You could use a bit more detail in your writing to make this a truly awesome fic.

Oh, such a bittersweet story, probably one that was told over and over again in that dark time of Narnia's history. I think you presented this moment very well - I could feel the stillness and quiet of the scene as the brothers discussed the hard choices of survival and having a future. It was very introspective - anything more or any action besides their slight motions and hushed voices would have spoiled the mood you set with the first sentence. It's interesting the measures these two Dwarfs are willing to take to keep their families safe - one will go into hiding, the other will hide in plain sight. It's impossible to say if one brother is right and the other is wrong. Nicely done!

So sad. but very good.

This story is good, but it lacks somethings. First, it lacks beauty of expression. Second, I think you need a bit of work on your writing style, read up some more on exceptional authors, those who make their character's come alive, and off the page seemingly like your living it, or watching a movie. Some I might recommend would be 1. Electrum, a bit slow at updating, but absolutely amazing. 2.Capiego, awesome poet, she really understands the metaphorical, and beauty of expression deal. 3.Jeune Chat (Sky High), swears a bit much, but in her most recent chapter, she really keeps you glued to the page. 4.Almyra, Quite good, and keeps you in your story, but the stories aren't quite alive. Of course C.S. Lewis, and J.R.R. Tolkien are excellent reads.

Anyway, its good, its just really brisk, and lacks both intrigue, and beauty of expression.
-JM