Strange pairing. But I liked it anyway. It's very well written, and I think your english teacher probably thinks you're very talented. Which you definitely are.

Oho, had I been in charge of GS(D), Yzak would have been my main character as well. I LOVE THAT GUY.

Holy HELL, your first paragraph fuckin' ROCKS. That sucked me in completely. Oh, I love this whole thing so far. "Since when did light qualify as valid company?" THAT'S a clever question.

Oh. WHOA - this is Shiho and Dearka, that's right! It's hard to image. Or... it was before, but you know something? You just made me really giddy about it. Shiho and Dearka... Hmm. HMM. VERY interesting. I actually hope you write more!

GAH - why is it that everyone else I know has somehow managed to fit something about anime into one of their English assignments?! I have not yet had that opportunity, and I'm already in college. What the heck is this?! I WANT YZAK TO HELP ME PASS MY CLASSES, TOO! Hahaha. Unfortunately, I haven't read much Poe, and therefore I have not the faintest idea of what story you played off of. I have a whole huge tome full of his works, though, so maybe this summer I'll sit down and read them. I remember one about a heart that kept beating and freaked out this murderer... What was it called? ANYWAY - nicely written fanfiction! Good job.

hmm, it was different, that's for sure. i never really thought of Shiho and Dearka together, ever. good on you for trying something new, it was actually well written and everything...but i don't think the pairing is very popular...or actually thought of!
i laughed though when i saw you wrote this for an english journal:) at least all the grammar and spelling is correct!