This is one of the few OC stories I like at all. Very, very good!

I didn't read it yet but I think you should know, Avalanches aren't rock or earthly elements. Avalanches are snow that slides down a mountain and burries you.

It would not be for earthbenders but waterbenders.

Rock Slides or mud slides are the "Earthly" name for an Avalanche.

Hmm seems reasonably possible for this to happen, I can imagine that reaction from some gruff man that was just beaten by a little girl.Good job!.

Great story. I like the Avalanches' character and your writing skill good. Keep up the good work.

Rating: Two-and-a-half stars (out of four)


I should have known not to make my expectations so high. Here I was thinking this would be a story that borderlines the intensity and depth of the film "Raging Bull". Not so, which is not necessarily a bad thing had the story been better.

The Avalanche starts off sounding like Jake La Motta: bad relationship, insecurities fuel his overconfidence, etc. By the end, he's more philosophical than arrogant, which tells me that this man knows exactly what he's talking about. He is the highlight of the story.

As for the rest, I can't say much for. This is only a short story, but lacks enough detail to support it. The fight is predictable and not at all exciting (but that's not really your fault). Toph shows hints of her true character, but not enough to make her actually worth reading about.

If you revise this story, I suggest you make it a little bit more descriptions. That is in terms of thought, action, and characterization. There is potential here.

P.S. "Raging Bull" is a Martin Scorsese film that I highly recommend to those into movies.