 Maiden-Chan 2007-05-08 . chapter 5Aw, I can't believe this doesn't have any reviews. I think it's very original, and I like the idea of an outsider, just a normal girl, experiencing the club in a normal way.
I think you try not to make her a Mary-Sue (she's obviously not, so don't worry) but by trying you almost forget to give her much of a character! Although I think it's cool that you never mention this girl's name.
And there's no real plot, either (it's just normal host things going on - it'd be a bit more exciting if something was happening, like an event or whatever).
E, I really don't mean to offend by that, because this story works fine anyway. xD And you don't need to take my advice, either.
So far: I'm loving the twins' perversion (not in a twincest fangirl way), this girl's fear of Tamaki, and her observation that Haruhi seems to be the waiter. Oh, and her conversation with Mori. ^_^
Woah. Ultra long review. o_O Sorry 'bout that. |