Reviews for Why do we think about Age?

Reviews For: Why do we think about Age?

God'sBeautifulPromise 2008-05-18 ch 4,	abuseI love this basic idea of this story- so cute! I wish you would elaborate more on the details. It will make your chapters longer and give readers a better idea of what's going on. First off, I'd like to say that I don't think you're being very true to the character of Ruthie- at least in the third chapter. I'm sorry, but I haven't read past that at this point. If you go back to the books, you'll see that Ruthie isn't the type of person that would automatically assume that Sterling and Kit are secretly dating. Another thing from chapter three: in fanfiction, you don't have to include details that the reader would already know if they read the book(s). Therefore, the explanation of Grace is unnecessary, and can (and should) be deleted if at all possible. But the one thing I cannot ignore is your grammar and typos. Now, I can understand where you're coming from, because we all make mistakes like that every once in a while, but if it's in almost every other sentence than it's too much. It can get very annoying, and I almost stopped reading your story because of it. But I like this plot idea too much to stop, and I really want to see where you're going with it, so I'll keep reading. But all and all, keep writing! I think the Kit story is unique and has potential. (Please don't take this the wrong way...) ~God's Beautiful Promise By the way, I love the hobo! He's a nice twist to the usual Kit/Sterling paring.
mikorena 2008-01-27 ch 1,	abuselet me tell you all the stuff that should be imprved i noticed way too spelling errors.plus its a bit confusing with all the storys being together i forget wether it's about kit or felcity. like the story idea though
mikorena 2008-01-27 ch 12,	abusei really like the idea of your story and hope you submit the next chapter soon
WalkingWit 2008-01-16 ch 4,	abuseYou've got potentially two stories here. Separate Kit and Felicity's stories. Check your spelling and grammar, because it makes no sense at the moment. This would be much better if you fix those.
bookfaerie 2007-12-08 ch 2,	abuseI think you need to separate the stories. Switching between two, three, maybe five POVs can be extremely confusing. The English needs punctuation and grammar corrections--possibly spelling as well. You have talent, but I would say to make things clear before submitting them.
MRSTJ1 2007-11-11 ch 1,	abuseYou might have some interesting ideas, but I can't tell because you have the most atrocious spelling, punctuation and grammar I have ever seen, and I've seen quite a lot. Even if English is not your native language, it can't be excused. Try really looking at your stories before you submit.
Old-Fashioned Girl22 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseI love your story. You have a very good plot. Can't wait for more!
roughdiamond5 2007-10-15 ch 12,	abuseAnnabelle Bananabelle, you're so evil to spread nasty rumors! This is going to get so tricky and I can't wait to see what other surprises you have in store, please update soon!
roughdiamond5 2007-10-12 ch 11,	abuseWow, that really is a tricky love triangle-square-some shape like that! I think everyone's really confused, but I can't wait to see if Felicity's world feels the same way! At least Will and Sterling are getting along okay, and so are Kit and Will. But please update soon, you almost scared me to death by not updating in like a month!
juliarox101 2007-09-17 ch 4,	abuseGood story, but what about Ben and the army? He probably would've left by this time. I sort of skipped over the Kit story.
MackenzieW 2007-08-21 ch 3,	abuseAll right, I only made it up to Chapter 4. You seem to have two potential stories here. There really isn't nothing connecting Felicity's and Kit's story except that they are both having guy problems. I would separate them and rewrite them as two separate stories. But if you chose to continue, please get some to beta/proofread this story. There are many errors that a second pair of eyes can catch. Also, if please try to stick with one POV or else don't write the name of the person whose POV it is--have you ever read a book that does that? (And if you have, I'd love to know). If you want, I could try to fit in beta-ing for you. The talent is there, it just needs some guidance.
piccolabimba 2007-08-19 ch 1,	abuseplease proofread! Caps and letter switches are prevalent, otherwise, cool idea
roughdiamond5 2007-07-16 ch 10,	abuseYay! You updated! I'm so glad! And that was a really funny chapter! That was a great plan Felicity made. Please update soon so I can see Kit get jealous possibly!
roughdiamond5 2007-07-14 ch 9,	abuseOoh, this is gonna get good! Update soon please! Oh, where are my manners? Hi, I'm roughdiamond5. I usually read Maximum Ride fanfiction, but when I saw that there was American Girl fanfiction I clicked on it because I still like American Girl. Your story looked most promising, so I cicked on it, and now, nine chapters later, I can only say that I can't believe that you only have one review! This is genius! I would never think of any of this! Please, you have to update soon!
coca-cola addict 2007-05-09 ch 6,	abuseThe relationships seem a bit sudden but beyond that I really like it...Write more! Pretty please (insert the biggest, wateriest puppy dog eyes you've ever seen and/or imagined, you know the type you just can't say no to ;) -coke addict (should have reconsidered the bad connotation when I picked this as my pen name...)

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