this one is good. i think you got Gatsby pretty well.

WOW! You wrote this falling asleep?! I don't believe it XD.

This is really good! You certainly caught Jack's essence ^.^.

This is a great poem!

Last verse was amazing! "For I am the Lord of the Flies." Wow! I would have definitely used this if I was your teacher! Great imagery, really reminds me of Jack. Well done!

I just read Lord of the Flies for a summer engliish assignment, and think your poem is a real cool reflection of Jack. Accurrate, too. Hope you got an A on it.

very nice! i liked it a lot!

that was actually pretty good. I didn't finish the book yet but I think I just figured out the end... whoops.

Awesome~! You were half asleep?! I couldn't write something like that in 15 mins fully awake! -_- When I first read it, I thought Jack was narrating. When I read it over again, it made sense. We did a semi proj. on Lord of the Flies in class also. I made a soundtrack. ;)

good on you for posting it! I still think its a great poem for Jack.