love that last sentence! lol :)

Interesting...

Very well done! I could pick up on the story without really having read any of the

Lackey books. Waiting patiently for the next few chatpers. *taps foot while waiting* hurry hurry hurry.

really cool. very original. i can't wait to hear the next part. you're a very talented writer. i could go on...but let's just say that this is Wonderful, with a W. :)

Yay for Chesh! Kick that officer! Thanks for the little background history, and cool intro for her! You aren't anywhere near finished, please post more soon.

COOL! I wanna find out wha happenms next!