Wow. I'd never thought of that before. I loved the reference to HKDS. Katherine's story was based off of Saedra, right?
I suppose Aslan would want all the Kings and Queens of Narnia to be of the same bloodline, as a way of saying that this is the family that I trust, and no one else. Although the whole Lucy/Caspian situation is wierd. Imagine having a mother who was Queen of your land thirteen thousand years earlier.
On Earth, royal families switch. A dynasty dies off or is destroyed in a war, and another takes over, like in China and England. Why do you think that Aslan wanted only one bloodline ruling his country? I'm interested in hearing your thoughts.
xoxo,
Silver Huntress

i added the whole song because it touches my heart! and i think it would touch other people's heart. apparently not yours! and what's wrong with sapphire eyes and a love interest for Edmund? it's always a girl for Peter and if Edmund likes her, he never gets her! I don't like you alright? I've seen you trash and discourage some other writers in reviews!

I like this! I too enjoy the exploration of what ifs and could bes...especially with the pairings; I wonder if, as some say it was rumored before Lewis died, that he was entertaining a book on Susan. Any thoughts on that? Oh and I am headed off to check your Narnian family tree.

This is an interesting, original idea...but that doesn't necessarily make it a good one. Sorry. Lucy being connected to King Frank was cool -- though that makes it seem that unless she HAD been, she wouldn't have been allowed even into Narnia, which doesn't make sense even, since you never mentioned Jill.

All the illicit relationships were, at best, ridiculous, and at worst, a degredation. Edmund having an affair with his brother's wife? That sounds /nothing/ like the Edmund I know. Caspian summoning Lucy with the horn (which was to be used only in his time of greatest need) was...creepy.

The Jill/Rillian reference (only a bedtime story -- who would tell their kids that kind of story?) was interesting.

You really wrote this quite well; your style is enchanting and your writing is great. It's just your characterizations and suppositions that I have trouble with.

I must say this to Siberian Christmas, that "stuck-up, bossy girl from England" is "Her Majesty, by the gift of Aslan, by election, by prescription, and by conquest, Queen of Narnia", the Valiant one, a Queen of Old, One of THE 4. To say that about a King or Queen by the Gift of Aslan is to say that about him. YOU Sir, Have No Honor!

Now, where was I?

I can see Edmund have a daughter, but an illegitimate one? Maybe, jest maybe, But I think Not. But illegitimate daughter with the Wife of The High King, his brother? NO WAY! He is THE JUST King!

Aslan may Not have approved(I know I do Not) But approving of it is one thing and jest let it happen is something else.(maybe That why they when back?) And he Not have began a new Bloodline, because Bloodline is the Bloodline. It like King David with the Wife of Uriah; God sad the Christ was coming in David's Bloodline is he HAS to come in this Bloodline, No If, No Buts about it, It jest has to.

And I can jest Not see the Lucy/Caspian at all, and the horn Not work like that.

It is well written and I LIKE the Pevensies being related to King Frank. It a Very Good Idea over all.

Ahem, nice imagination. Frankly, there is not a whit to back any of that up, of course. Your suggestions that Peter and Edmund and Caspian had secret relations with women, whoever they were, is an insult to C.S. Lewis (you will remember, these are his characters you are dealing with). If I were Caspian, I would jump at the chance to marry a Star's daughter over having relations with a stuck-up, bossy girl from England.

If you want to disregard the integrity and honour of C.S. Lewis' characters and sacrifice all that for some unbroken blood-line for a throne, be my guest. I'll tip my hat to the audacity of obscenity.

Siberian Christmas, Friend of Narnia

Edmund's DAUGHTER?! Good heavens above, Edmund doesn't have a daughter, and certainly NOT an illegitimate one! Aslan would have been utterly disgusted, and Edmund, THE JUST, would have never, ever, ever stooped to such a thing!

*gasp gasp* Okay, okay. I'm calm. Calming, at least. The story was wellwritten, and the idea of the Pevensies being related to Frank was interesting. But the relationships in this story definitely need to be redone. I'm sorry.

That is nuttily awesome in its own twisted warpy insanly gnarled family tree sort of way. It's like family trees of the families of Greek heroes. There's several that Zeus is on at least twice, if not three times.

As with the last reviewer, I must confess that I am heartily disappointed and shocked with the relationships that have been portrayed in "A Web Woven".
The CrON is Christian based, written by a Christian author, specifically for children (and children at heart).

While it would be interesting to have a complete and instructed bloodline throughout the reign of all the Narnian monarchs, Aslan, being a symbol of Jesus, would not have aloud such wickedness to occur just to accomplish it.
This discredits any of the morals that are taught in the CrON and gives the stories (meant for a childish audience)a undesirable reputation.

This is especially true since Honor and Safety are stressed to such an extent in the books.
(ie. In the VODT, everyone is concerned for Lucy's honor and safety as the "Invisible People" [the Duffers] demand that she go to the upstairs of the Magicians House.)
Here is just one example. I could point out many others from all the books.

In a sum of everything then, the main concerns that struck me in "A Web Woven" is its inconsistency with the main themes of the Chronicles of Narnia and detestable wickedness that was light-heartedly portrayed.

Brace yourself: a /VERY/ long review follows:

this was a very well written story. It seams a little straight forward, but it is an excellent style

I don't mean to be completely discouraging or anything, but this story kind of bothered me. Somehow I don't believe Aslan would have approved with all of the affairs and things going on.it was awkward to try believing for a moment that half those things went on, partly because they were all so young, and partly because... i don't know, it just /didn't seem right/. Somehow I feel that Aslan wouldn't have stood for it, that he would have began a new Bloodline or something. (like the Flood)I do, however, like you you tied Frank and Lucy together, but everything else was just weird for me. I couldn't imagine half of those things really happening. I have always felt that the 'Sons and Daughters of Adam and Eve' were never an /actual/ bloodline, but a figurative one. Just like we are not /actual/ brothers and sisters in Christ, but sort of /figurative/ ones. one could become a Son/Daughter of Adam/eve by accepting the things Aslan teaches, by believing Aslan... just like we become a family in Christ by accepting and believing in him. By creating an actual Bloodline, it says that unless you are of The Bloodline, you cannot be a true king/queen of Narnia. (or, on our world, you cannot become a Christian unless_. it doesn't matter what the _ is, there shouldn't be one at all. anyone who accepts and believes in Christ can become a Christian...)

don't let me get you down, this just wasn't my kind of story. Keep writing, and good luck!

oo, i really liked this. this is really original, something i don't think anyone else has ever considered. i especially, especially liked the connection between frank and the pevensies. it makes me think of ways digory could have met the pevensie parents, and etc. i also really liked this line, for some reason:

The Witch came out of the North, and severed the bloodline with her cold knife of stone.

brilliant!

Story/Characters: 7.5/10. Lots of really cool ideas. It fits in well with the timeline and I like that you are not afriad to "go there" regarding how some of these connections are made. I have to say that it feels more like a good summary than an actual story, though. Also, I'm not terribly fond of the idea that there has to be this special "bloodline". One of the things that I liked about the Narnian kings was that they never seemed special in terms of their blood.

Creativity: 8/10. Lots of good ideas that I think you could tease out a little.

Writing: 8.75/10. I like your style and your writing is very good in general, though it is a bit different to read a story with no dialogue.

Believability: 8.5/10. I think that all of your links make sense and everything fits in well with canon. The only thing that seemed out of place was the use of the word "railway" -- it didn't seem to fit in with your somewhat epic writing style.

Overall: 8.25/10. Very well written piece with a lot of interesting ideas, but it doesn't quite feel like a story to me.

Ooh, a very nice way of connecting them all. I like that Lucy was Frank's grand-niece; it completely works with canon and seems almost obvious, when you think about it, but I hadn't. I have to wonder about that chat Peter and Edmund must have had when Peter found out what Ed had been up to with his wife!

I like how you made it all one line. It really does make sense, in a strange, half-light way.

You did a great job with this idea- I call it an idea because it is almost like an essay but it is told in story form, as if you are talking directly to the reader. If you were pickier about your words and separated the different part of the idea I would find it easier to read, but I will admit that I am partial to certain types of writing, but you did do a great job! Keep it up!