This story rocks man. You should continue it. Update soon!

his is fantastic writing! I love your story. It's one of the only pre-Organization 13 fics that I can take seriously. I hope you continue to update this, its too great to be left dead.

i am so in love with Ienzo...and Zexion xD
this was awesome! i love how you connected Kairi to the apprentices and her being a three foot spy

I really like this. :) You do a really good job of keeping this canonish, but at the same time using enough of your own creative liberties to give them believable, conflicted emotions on what they're doing, as well. Really awesome- I love apprentice!fic. Your Kairi's adorable, too, btw... keep up the good work! :p

I love Xehanort's motivations! I love how much he wants to impress Ansem, I love how attached he is to Radiant Garden, I love how afraid he is of getting in trouble! I love how much he wants to be praised. And I love how deeply Ansem sees Xehanort mind.

It had never occured to me that Saïx may have known Xehanort, but your reasoning makes a lot of sense.

A storyteller once told me that nothing is more boring than a villian who is pure evil. I agree; people with difficult choices make more interesting villians than idiots with bad intentions.

I found this story by searching for Xehanort under the characters menu. I wanted to read a story that speculated about the history of his character, particularly one making connections between he and Terra. This was the first story I found that knowledgeably dealt with speculation.

I recognize the story of light from KH1. Too many theorists forget about it, or don't incorporate it. I'm glad to see it in the first chapter. ^^

How do you stand on the possible Terra/Xehanort connection? You chose seventeen to be the age that Xehanort appeared in Radiant Garden, and apparently he appeared as an "unknown soldier"! Oh~ this makes me excited! I noticed that the name Xehanort was pulled from him, but that doesn't mean it was originally his name, does it?

Asleep? Braig was asleep? As in the Room of Sleep? I just about had a heart attack when I read that!! Why did you chose that for him? It confuses me how he could have seen the three knights: the world they were on wasn't Radiant Garden (and I personally believe that it was quite a while in the past). What do you believe the purpose of the Rooms of Sleep and Awakening are?

"It may even be possible to have it bow at your feet. The darkness can sense what is weak." Excellent motivation for Xehanort. It fits the character. Did you pull this line from the game, or write it yourself?

"...the ones that Xehanort had spent a desperate and frantic string of days and weeks trying to revive without success." A small action to redeem the character.

“...that’s what makes this exciting.” Exciting?! What a reckless personality! (Terra fought rather recklessly in Birth By Sleep.)

And Xehanort's physical prowess while dancing with the Shadows; what did his associates think as they watched?

I like the small liberties you've taken to establish your "what if?"--I really loved the interaction between Ansem and Kairi as you wrote it out. You write the apprentices nicely, especially Xehanort, and I'm intrigued by how everything's been laid out so far.

And there shouldn't be any problem with using the apprentices' names as you've written them--I think it's well known by fandom that the names were a bit mangled when they were translated from the Japanese version.

I look forward to more!

Wonderfully intriguing. I always love different authors' takes on what Xehanort was like, and exactly what happened. The various interactions between characters was nice to see as well.

Wow!

This is great! Really! I've been waiting for a fiction like this for quite some time. What DID happen? Eh?

I even didn't see any errors in writing!

Great job! Keep it up! I'll be reading!