Honestly, I like this one. I have trouble finding any good ACC/Self-insert fics that are good, and this one seems good. So far. lol
Please upload the other chapters! You have hooked my interest with these five "teaser" chapters, and I want to finish reading the story!

Dude, you say this is really that bad for a first fic...i don't think so, i mean sure you've improved from this, but people have witten loads worse and wasn't even their first fic

i really wouldn't mind seeing the rest of this

Actually pretty good, wouldn't have thought this to be a first fic. It's definitely not shitty at all. I would greatly appreciate it if you could either post the remaining chapters or e-mail them to me (use my account to get my address if doesn't allow attachments). I am a devoted fan (of you, EVA, and DARTZ, even though I've never been to Ireland) and look forward to your next update on all of your stories.

Dartz, buddy, this does suck some massive cock. But you have guts and balls to put it up and lick it all clean.

"The predominantly black suit, black hair and red eyes contrasted sharply with my pale skin and made me look positively evil but at the same time jaw-droppingly beautiful. The funny thing was I was more comfortable wearing a skin-tight plugsuit than I was a skirt."

When written in a first person perspective, it sure sounds you like have some wardrobe complication.

Reminds me of my evolution as a writer. Many eons ago when I started writing, I produced some real crap that wasn't fit for lining birdcages.

I admit that I really detest SI fics, but you have here isn't quite as bad as what I would call a shit fic. I've seen, and read, far worse. It seems you at least had an idea of where you were going with it.

Kudo's for throwing it out there though to see what happens.

well you got me interested as it stands, and it doesn't really matter if you use the basis of another's idea as long as you exicute it in a new fashion.
Plus its an SI, the only was to really do better than the others is to be original, plus your chara isn't exactly marry sue, I've seen and done worse.
I'll drop it on my story alert in case you do decide to continue

I'm reviewing just to applaud you for putting this up.

Those who would say that you're...overly harsh with your reviews would fall silent at your courage in posting a work that obviously doesn't meet your standards. Rather than being hypocritical, this shows that you're just like the next guy out there, and that this is NOT what should be out there. Your embarrassment allows the fic to parody itself, which is not at all a bad thing in this case.

The fact that people can see what you started out as, and can now see where you are now, is able to give them hope at least...

Anyways, keep up the 'good' work *winks and points to this fic* and stay frosty.

Nathan

for a shitfic this isn't half bad realy

You broke my industrial strength goggles. :P

Yep, everyone writes at least one shitfic. The key is just to improve on from there. Either by figuring out what you did wrong yourself or by listening to what other reviewers have to say. Although I'd have to say that this is probably the first time anyone has ever posted their first fic after they've improved.

And it shouldn't be too difficult to practice some constructive criticism on this. Plenty of places it could use improvement.