A great story. You captured Gil's emotions very well.

The song I think is sung by LeAnn Rimes. One of my favorite singers. Other than that, very good.

As I wrote in another review, think positive and be confident. Sara will survive.

You could benefit from a beta. Proofreading is necessary.

Use the dictionary.

Summery/Summary-

Summery means resembling summer.

Summary means covering the main points.

prey and preyed/pray and prayed-

Prey means an animal hunted or caught for food.

Pray means address God, say a prayer.

He (preyed/prayed) that she was still alive.

Wrong-roller costar

Right-roller coaster

loose/lose-

Loose means not tight.

Lose means fail to win.

I'll never be happy again if I (loose,lose) you, Sara.

dessert/desert-

Dessert has an extra "s" for sugary treat: pie, cake, ice cream.

Desert means a desolate area.

How would he ever live without Sara if she died, just died alone in the (dessert/desert) somewhere?

Continue writing and work to improve.

oh wow, hope he finds sara first thing come season 8! wonderful fic!