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| Ducky'sgirl4ever 2008-08-04 ch 1,  | abuseA great story. I liked the part where they were all thinking about what had happened. |
| Ninde Ancalime 2007-05-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good story, it's realistic in the sense that Lindsay would feel guilty not being the one in the warehouse, but also because she would kind of be glad that he was the one that was there [after all, who *would* want to be in that situation?]... but the last paragraph confused me. A lot. Is it that Lindsay is going to try to re-establish her relationship with Danny? Are you alluding to her being pregnant, if so, then why was she smoking? I highly doubt that Lindsay would be the type of person who smokes period, much less if she thinks she's pregnant... lastly I don't get the last line... it kind of made it seem like if she was pregnant, he'd regret taking her place at the warehouse even more. I think the confusion is mostly due to the way the sentences were constructed. Anyways, it's a really good plot to go with for the first story written in five years. =] |