I absolutely hate Mai and Maiko alike. You made it work.

There were, however, a couple of flaws. Zuko was thirteen when he fought his father. That means that if Mai were nine, she would be only... eleven now. A sixteen year old kissing an eleven year old is kinda creepy. It would probably fit better if she was eleven or twelve in this.

Also, in the flashback in The Storm, Azula was standing in the crowd next to Iroh. She couldn't have been on a throne.

Other than that, it was great! The whole Water-tribe slaves thing was cool too.

Bravo!

-Dovetail19 (this would be signed, but I'm too lazy to log in. :P )

1. Katara's mom wasn't a waterbender.
2. Katara's mom is dead.
3. Mai isn't nine. Then she'd be twelve in the series.
Apart from that, it was really good ^^ I love Iroh, too.

Great story! Only, if Mai was 9, then Zuko would be 10- but he had the angi kai when he was 14...But it was good anyway ;)

Very nice! (And don't worry, I shift tenses all the time.) I love Mai and Zuko together--I don't know if you've seen Season Three of Avatar, as you seemed like it was a strange idea for Zuko and Mai to be a couple, but in Season Three, they're together! =]

Great story! "Leave a scar" - so cruel but i can just imagine that was what happened.

This. Was. Amazing. I'm shocked there aren't more reviews for it.

Mai's characterization was perfect. The show really gives us so little, and makes her so one dimensional. You took what they did give us, and made her so utterly perfect. The decision not to cry, and to love Zuko's scar, and to lie to him...geez, perfection.

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

-Becky

I personally loved the description of his skin bubbling and cracking. Made me shudder! There were a few typos, nothing big and it didn't take away from the fic, so don't worry about it. I really liked this. Cheers!

-Smeagol's girl

Very nice. Keep up the wonderful work. "Until the Next Chapter"

Wow, very powerful. Wonderfully written.
Great job!

I like this alot, particularly the ending where Mai is talking about making herself unfeeling, since I found that explaination for how she is in the future really interesting.

The only thing I don't really like about the story is the present tense, especially since it wasn't completely consistant throughout the entire story. Something about present tense kind of makes it hard to get immerged in the writing...but maybe that's just me. And hell, I'm a huge hypocrit or something saying that since I've written in present tense too. XP

But overall, it's a wonderful story. Gives great insight into Mai's character.

Pretty good story. I think your right about the waterbender slaves.

Mai isn't totally obsessed with Zuko, and they don't have slaves! Grr! And Mai wouldn't be nine, she'd be thirteen. But it was okay otherwise.

Great story! Thanks so much for writing this! God bless!

I like it! I really enjoy avatar stories!

good oneshot