That's pretty good! oh well, actually I will suggest you to continue it since it will be quite an interesting story if you continue it like how they manage to die together or struggle. But it's said it is 'complete' so it's too bad

Brilliant! IT MOVED ME TO TEARS!(Forester:YOUR EYES ARE SO DRY I COULD BLOW DUST OFF OF THEM!)...Ignore him...he's...(an idiot)young...

That was FUCKING AWESOME! id underline and bold if i could. Anyway a little on the short side but worth a read!