Ultima, its been awhile since ive reviewed, but i didnt remember how much i hated this story to begin with. Anyway, ive been trying to come with some dialogue tips for u. as a writer, i understand that evryone is bad at something. take me: im horrible with detail. cant imagine things around characters well. but anyway, like i said, im goin to try to come up with some things to help with dialogue.

Ok, can i tell you something?
This FanFic was the very first one I read on this site.
I am not kidding you. This was way back when I first became a Shadow fan-I became an even bigger one after this I'll tell ya. And you know what? I forgot about it until a year and a half later when my friends got me into . Then, I remembered that this was on here a few months after I started an account and published my first story. Am I stuipid or what? What I'm trying to say is that I owe a lot to your creativity, imagination, and mad writing skills. Thank you so much! This story was and is awe inspiring! I read it 7 or so times after the first.
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wow, that was the longest review I've ever written!

Hey, Ultima, I just thought I'd tell you why, as you like. I don't like it when people mess around with Shadow. He is now and always will be my favorite character, (sorry if there are any typos. i'm holding my baby brother david at this point and he's thrashing) and it bothers me when he's acctually a girl or the author makes him a wuss. i also hate it when the author makes him bad. thank you for writing something with a thick plot, though.

M... Now that is better, Dan. Thanks for the comments, here. Yes, though, I understand what you're saying. My hardest part is dialogue. I generally try to avoid too much, but there are times when it is impossible to do so. Some of my even newer works probably have some improvements, but dialogue is still my problem point. However, detail (assuming I can think of how I want it to appear) is easily my strong point, here.

Another problem of mine, I will admit, is proper punctuation. However, as you stated, it's mainly just with commas and other mid-sentence punctuation marks. I'm still working on trying to improve my writing, though, so if you have any other things that may help, let me know. Again, I simply do not like critiques that leave out the "why."

As for "Shannon," I just got this concept in my head for an interesting story based around Shadow, but having been changed in such a way where he was unrecognizable, and also being unable to remember who he was, proving it very difficult to determine exactly what was going on. Later I threw in the Maria thing which showed just why Shadow looked like Shannon while in that specific form.

Yes, I know amnesia had been related to Shadow in the past, but I liked this concept overall. And no, I didn't like Shadow getting amnesia after SA2, but I wasn't nearly as irritated about it as others were. I mainly used the amnesia thing to work it out. I enjoy mystery, so I wanted to make it mysterious, with small things being thrown in here and there to clue you in on what is going on (though admittedly, I'm known for throwing in too many clues).

Anyway, is there any specific reason why you didn't like this aspect? You probably can't reply to the same chapter, but you can either email me or or comment on a different chapter.

I liked how you ended it. I always liked Maria, but I still don't like the fact that Shadow was "Shannon." I look forward to reading your sequel. but remember, don't use 'proclaimed so much.

I read your response. I think you should use other words when someone says something. I noticed you use 'proclaimed' kind of alot. Also, there are commas when there shouldn't be and no commas where there should be. I will admit, this chapter was much better than the others, but cut down on the use of 'proclaimed'.

Well, in reply to a review... I'm sorry to hear that, Dan. However, while I don't mind criticism, I prefer structured criticism; what parts of the plot do you not like? Why don't you like them? Where are areas that my grammar and spelling could be improved?

Quite frankly, I'll admit that the plot isn't the best, but as for grammar and spelling, I'm constantly trying to improve that, and I also make sure to check over my works before submitting them. Of course, though, I can't always find everything that needs improvement. Even then, what parts are you referring to? If you're referring to older parts of the story, then of course it needs improvement--this story is my longest to date, so obviously, the quality of the writing will improve as the story progresses.

Once again, I'm sorry that you don't like the story, but if you want me to respect you more, please give constructive criticism; and I don't mean "Don't say it's bad." If you think it's bad, then tell me WHY you think it's so bad, and in more detail than what you stated. That's all I have to say at this time.

I hate this story. Your grammer is terrible. You mispell words all the time, and you have a stupid plot. I'm only reading it because I started to.

I cannot beleive that Shannon is Shadow. This sucks.

Nice ending. You made a couple of things a bit too obvious with your final twist, would've been better with a shock announcement statement, and then the reveal as to how.

Otherwise this was a very well thought through story.

This was a great chapter and all, but I couldn't help but get confused. Since when was Rouge turned into a human and how exactly did Shadow change back into a hedgehog? Other than these two things I noticed that weren't really explained, I really thought you did a wonderful job. And if I missed anything to hint the two things that I mentioned, please point them out. Thanks for such a wonderful story.^^ I love it!:w00t:

Wow! Excellent Chapter! It was really action packed and once again were left off in suspense.^^ Wootness! Anyway...^^;xD Hope to read more of this soon. It's awesome!:)

Cool fict and Congrats. Continue soon please.

Wow neat story! Eggmans or RobotniKs plan seems like only the beginning where the chapter last stopped.I wonder where it will go from there...
I'm on the edge of my seat from suspense keep going it's good.

Sweet chappie Ultima!^^ w00t! w00t! I so can't wait to read more!;) Looks like I'm gonna have to though since you mentioned writer's block. But that's quite alright. I know exactly how you feel.:) I've had writer's block for a while now.^^; And believe me, it's no fun.;( I try my best though. You can't always do everything. So I just want to let you know that if it takes a while, then it's worth the wait.^_^ Plus, it'll turn out even better. Well... Hope to hear from you again soon.^^ Bya!;)