Phew i thought bella was just going to accept Edward. That was close. Uhoh whats bad evil eddie going to do now? Hopefully super quil will come save the day! DA DA DUM! SUPER QUIL! lol sorry i had cookies! update soon Love it

update soon.

What? What did she say that was too much? I'm already pissed off at Bella for other reasons but what did she say? Is Edward going to find Quil and reunite them or something? (gag me) Their love is too strong for this 'Quil thing' to be true... God, i can't get over it, sorry, but wow *deep breath*.. calm down brooke.. Okay if you could (i know i have almost no right to ask because of how mean these reviews are[again i'm sorry] but could u PM me with an explantion as to what the heck Bella said that was too much?) Edward shouldn't have/ wouldn't have lied to Bella like that, cuz when she finds out (and i know she will) she'll use that against him, along with the whole Jacob thing, which btw, was just as much Jakes fault as Edwards. Okay this is way longer than i intended, so i'll leave you with words of hopefully encouragement:

Your writing is very well done and descriptive. Your understanding of how to deliver feelings in words is very good. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

*walks off stage*...seconds pass... *runs back out and raises arms in the air* "Edward Cullen Forever!" *sprints off stage as EntrustingLove throws rotten vegetables at her*

Peace.

Update now now now! You really shouldn't do that to people you know!

I LOVE your story! It's a really great concept, and I can't wait to read more! I hope you update soon, I don't wanna stop reading it, lol.

EDWARD! You $% $%&% I can;t believe it! Lying! The scandal! And he excepects Bella to love him still when he lied to her about her lover killing her father! Curses! Edward! What were you thinking? Gah! I must cool down. Nice chapter though

CURSE YOU EDWARD

What a fantastic story! I am completely captivated by your Quil character.

I can't tell if Bella is on an emotional roller-coaster or in an emotional train wreck. Either way, my morbid curiosity makes it impossible for me to tear my eyes away from the scene.

This last twist was quite sudden, which worked well for shock value. In previous chapters, I think you used what I like to call "fluff cushions" very well. You spaced the plot development out with real finesse.

The pace has quickened, though, and my only recommendation is to not set a strict chapter limit for yourself (as it appears you have). Let things happen at a realistic pace. Let these characters sort their lives out themselves. If you push them to do it too quickly, it may feel forced to the reader. Don't let us take a moment to look up from the page. Keep us immersed in this wonderful world you've created. Keep us believing it all!

You are a magnificent writer, and I am eager (and terrified) to find out what's up ahead on the tracks.

P

I like it...but then again who doesn't like Edward?

As for Charlie and him getting killed by Quil...I feel that it was a catalyst that wasn't really needed. I wonder if it was you searching for a way for her to be unable to love Quil? I can't say that I like the way you've chosen to go about it if that is your intent. If not, I apologize. You could be taking us on a crazy roller coaster ride. )

I loved the rest of the story.

Who is Tianna? Why are her eyes green? I'm excited. Where is Alice and the rest of the Cullens? Will Quil try to come rescue her?

Why would Quil kill Charlie? Just loss of control? It seemed to me that you made him out to have some sense of control in earlier chapters...that is why this is so confusing to me.

But I loved it. I really loved the emotion that you put in this chapter. Keep it coming. You've got me hooked.

Your writing buddy

Marble Meadow

No! how could Edward lie? -glares at Edward- but i still like him better than can't wait for the next chapter!

-M

OH MY GOD!

THEY BLAMED QUIL FOR CHARLIES DEATH!

why? did they do it so bella wouldn't love quil anymore or did they blame quil so that bella wouldn't feel as bad as she would if she knew that charlie had commited suicide!

update pleassee (that was begging btw)

wow, well i really don't know where you're going with this. quil then edward? i don't know anymore. its getting . . . never mind

You are doing a very good job at making me hate Edward and that's not an easy thing to do believe you me! I know you most likely have the whole story figured out but I am warning you now that if she finds out Edward was lying and forgives him I will not be a happy camper. I'm still mad that she still loves him, I mean he killed her best friend! I'm dying to find out what happens update soon.

.i HATE edward with a passion in this story!

i'm a jake lover and he killed him...took bella away frm quil and i liked him as u prbably already kno..so yea i just got a little mad that he just did tht and then she believed him..grr.

newayz luv the story ur a wonderfull writer update soon.

i can't wait to read more.

*sigh* wtf... Edward wouldn't lie to her like that unless he did it to spare her feelings and i have a feeling thats not the way ur gunna spin it. She'll end up not listening to his explainations and she'll go back to Quil. I really enjoyed reading this chapter except for the one part. You're a very good writer.