|Reviews for Rhymes of pain|
| mandygrier 8/27/12 . chapter 1
Please!please! I beg of u make more itachixhinata i beg u please!
| Guest 7/9/12 . chapter 11
ok...ay wasn't the ending i was wanting but, good story
| Jacovy 6/26/12 . chapter 11
LOL This was funny but I didn't quite like the ending. I thought there was going to be another chapter but then you said 'the end' then I looked at your story stats. It said completed. I know it's too late to ask, but what about a sequel?
| XxXUchiha SurayaXxX 8/20/11 . chapter 11
OMG. Why the F are your stories so awesommmeeee. Gawshhh and yhur Notes Are Sooo Fhunnnyy damnit yeah xD making me laugh so loud in the mddle of the night xD
| XxXUchiha SurayaXxX 8/20/11 . chapter 7
Days are getting shorter...but nights are getting longer xD HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH you are xoooo fhunnyyy
| XxXUchiha SurayaXxX 8/20/11 . chapter 5
You are having a fight becuz som1 said blueberry wos purple -.- jeezz Hahahahahaha
| CarlitaMalfoy 2/22/11 . chapter 11
Really loved it! :D but... like they said, it would be better if you write one or two more chapters, you know, with a better endending... n.n
But, i liked it! n.n'
| LLL.HINATA.LLL 6/1/10 . chapter 11
| no longer in us 8/16/09 . chapter 11
I liked most of the story although I think the ending was way too "cliff hanger."
| Emmeline Creazil 7/5/09 . chapter 11
i like this story mucho..i went out of my way to find a story about dance(there is none about ballet, :[)
| Signature 5/31/09 . chapter 11
It doesn't feel like an ending, even if Itachi did say that they would talk to her father (a conclusion to the problem). It still just doesn't feel like an ending.
Otherwise, it was going good. I liked it.
| realityfling18 5/13/09 . chapter 1
| alexa157 4/16/09 . chapter 11
aww it's the end already :(
can't you just make a happy ever after chapter.
PLZ PLZ with cheries on top :)
| FullOfSugar 2/26/09 . chapter 11
Hum hum... let's criticise ! *evil smile*
Just joking I have nothing wrong to say about your story, it was cute and all, characters IC... except for the fact that, like always, Sakura was the biggest bitch ever and she really tried EVERYTHING to be Itachi's dancing partner ordering people to harm Hinata (how can she do that by the way she comes from the mafia or what? lol) but I don't blame you for that there is always the stereotype (generally Sakura) of the big bad bitch (B XD) ready to commit murder just to go out with the guy she wants
I know in order to spice up the story you have to put a threat upon the first character or something but I think the thing with Sasuke would have been enough. I like his role in the story by the way. He was a threat to Hinata but you don't hate him for that in the end, he was just sexually active a little too much
That's a credible but just as dangerous threat to Hinata. Sasuke just wants to *cough cough* her and then dump her since he doesn't care: things like that happens all the time, it's credible enough.
The thing with Sakura...er...let's say it borders obsession... she's like...a real psycho as in...mentally sick you know? Usually a girl who got rejected won't cling to the guy in that way (ok Sakura would cling, but she definitly won't try to hurt Hinata that way, in my opinion, she would just confess all the time and look pathetic until she moves on one day...) So the way you wrote about Sakura didn't make me roll my eyes but let's say it was a close call.
Even if you hate Sakura (I guess you don't like her that much?) you have to keep in mind that some people do (I hope, I like her I mean I don't have anything against her so that makes at least one person who likes her) and you have to write about the character as objectively as possible.
One thing I can't really stand is character bashing. Except for parody and humour, it really does ruin the story for me because that is so exagerated that it gives a total lack of credibility, even if I don't like the character being bashed (don't if that's a word...)
Anyway it was a cool story but I was just surprised to see it end like that, it didn't feel like it was finished to me.
In the end, are you gonna make a sequel? That would be great if you did :)
If you don't well...I'll still give you a sugar o
PS: sorry about the long review about the thing with Sakura, I really liked your story, it's just that the more the story is good, the more I find things to say. Go figure...
| harley944 2/3/09 . chapter 11
o this story was really good please write a sequel for it