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Reviews for: Möbius
G.
2009-10-31 . chapter 1
It's a good idea, and your writing is pretty good too.
But it's too short. The story is so compact that it just jumps around and you really don't even feel sad for Forrest Junior in the end, because you don't have the chance to know him.

The dialogue is also a bit static.

But like I said, it's still good, and the idea is really good.
Smile Life Away
2009-10-16 . chapter 1
Uh...can I say speechless...it was um...interesting I suppose. The way you tied in the Mobius with your point of going back to the beginning was clever I thought :) It moved fast though, over all it was interesting.
FehrPlay
2009-08-28 . chapter 1
I thought that was really good, and cleverly thought out. I reckon the ending could've been a little more detailed, as it seemed almost rushed to get the idea of the end out, but otherwise it was great. Excuse my crappy explanation skills there to.
Italian-Rose-xxx
2009-08-04 . chapter 1
That's so sad poor Forrest
2wingo
2008-06-16 . chapter 1
Fate can be so cruel.
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