Reviews for Fireworks and Lightning

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LOUDplacidity 2008-04-13 ch 1,	abuseAh.Hinata and Hiashi came too soon. And you shouldn't worry about what fanfiction allows. There are so many full blown lemons out there that when I first read this I would really see it more as rated T. So don't worry. You should make a two part. You are really a wonderful writer aside from some grammer and spelling mistakes.
Cry Yume 2008-01-08 ch 1,	abuseI that Kiba with Hanabi is actually really probable. Since Hinata's got Naruto and whatnot. Anyway. I think maybe it should be something like Kina. Or something. I dunno. KibaHana would look best... NaruHina looks cool. >_< And SasuSaku is fun to say. Never mind that. Hanabi seems rather mature, even for 16. I hate age differences. Like when you have to make a young character older, but then the one you want them to be with gets older, too. At least 16 and 21 isn't too bad. ... Did that make sense? xD
wickedone43 2007-11-15 ch 1,	abuseYou know, I've wanted to see Kiba with Hanabi ever since I read a fic called Syncretism...something like that. Anyway, it was the first time I read anything with these two characters. This is awesome! Please tell me you are going to continue this! It is so like to alpha's going at each other. Go for it!! I will surely read it!!
MayumiNorika 2007-10-15 ch 1,	abusei really like this story i don't know why, i really cannot picture this story so i keep reading it and reading it >< i hope i understand what it means yeah >< why still i cannot picture hanabi with a breast >< Well i really like this story Thanks for writing this story
M-dono 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abuseThere were was a number of grammar errors I've found. Mostly in tenses. Not to worry though, tenses are the most common of mistakes authors make. But I do suggest you proof-read again in order to find them.
s.lee 2007-09-14 ch 1, anon.	abusewoot! keep writing :]
Saint Dezzie 2007-08-20 ch 1,	abuseI love the way you wrote this - it's got 'insightful' written everywhere on this fic :) You really got me hooked on this couple too. Oh if only they were canon like this.
marginscribe 2007-08-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseBrilliant job, one of the best fics I've read about them thus far ^^ +looking forward to any potential new ones+
Kisei 2007-07-05 ch 1,	abuseI'll admit I was a bit thrown by the pairing, but I liked it. You really made it work, you made me think maybe Kiba really does love Hanabi, especially because he originally went to spite Hinata. This was perfect ^^
Ane S. Thesia 2007-07-01 ch 1,	abuse/sputters all over the place/ Buhbuhbuhb... O.O Kiba and Hanabi... are... hot. Together. XD I can't believe I just admitted that! SO ASHAMED I AM! I could just PINCH you for doing this! /walks away sputtering s'more/
realeza 2007-06-17 ch 1,	abusewow...i don't even know what to say except that this fic is greatly written! please continue!
Tea's 2007-06-09 ch 1,	abuseSo I've been sitting here staring at the little blank review box wondering what to say, because there's this bubble of text blinking in my head: My fic inspired this? MY fic! I felt like I got a great reward for writing "Simply Unspoken" or something. I really enjoyed this, and I'm looking forward to reading all the other Kiba/Hanabi fics you spoke of writing. :D I think this fic really grew into itself. It starts out in the middle of a scene and then fans out beautifully into this mix of emotions- both between the two and individually. It's raw, sensual, and filled with pure chemistry. I especially love this part: "Because, I've seen the way you looks at her." Kiba doesn't need to ask who. "And I wanted that. I wanted you to look at me like that." "Like what?" "Like you love me." I've always imagined Hanabi wanting what Hinata has with her teammates, and this part just struck a chord with me. I also like how Hanabi takes his kaku obi- I can just picture her doing that. Story goodness aside, I might read over the fic to comb through a few grammatical mistakes and tense issues though. There were parts where I tripped up a little during my reading... but that's possibly because I tend to notice these things more than the average person. :p But what's important is that you keep the Kiba/Hanabi fire burning (because it means I get to read more of them...bwaha)! Thank you very much for writing this. :)
Forever3330 2007-06-01 ch 1,	abuseI'm so glad people who aren't me like this couple now~ and are writing it. :D Because before I just had to bug my friends to roleplay with me. >_>;
dong-chun-mei 2007-05-27 ch 1,	abuseOMG! This was fucking AWESOME! My fave Hanabi/Kiba story so far!! Great work PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE! DO a sequil! DCM
Noma-sama 2007-05-22 ch 1,	abuse(()) Teh awesome! :3 Heehee. Keep this up and you may end up draggin' my tale onto the KibaHanabi bandwagon. PWP! e__e I like the thought o' that. -steeples fingers- Care to take a wack at it? I'll bring popcorn. -wiggles brows- I found a little typo here: --“Because, I’ve seen the way you looks at her.” Kiba doesn’t need to ask who.-- : There you go! Now, why ain't there more fans of this pairing? Bah. You'll draw them in eventually (I'm already inching in that direction). Keep it up Ash! -thumbs up-

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