Oh My. I just happened to stumble upon your story & I love it. The ending of ch. 10 surprised me. Though I can sympathize with Saix. Feel better & I'll be awaiting the next chap! & Now I'll go off & scavenger some of your other works!~

First, I want to tell you what everyone else has said: this chapter was amazing so stop feeling like you failed us (if that's what you mean by beating yourself up over it)! Seriously, I really wish I could write like you

And I love how you portray all the characters. You describe their personalities so well, especially through the way they all talk. And I don't mean just the organization, 'cause Hades cracked me up in the previous chapter. That was awesome xD

Oh, and I loved the little scene with Axel and Roxas. You need to include more of those! Yes, yes, I'm a rabid fangirl, I know >_>

Anyways,, I hope Saïx and Xemnas will stop listening to what others tell them (or in Xemnas case, what he tells himself) and realize they love eachother soon :3. ...But what'll happen to poor Garmjaw if Saïx leaves him? :O Oh, the dilemma...

Certainly I love everything except for one single thing...
HOW DARE YOU TO CUT SAIX HAIR?!
THE DOOM...THE DOOM!
-cries in a corner-

...and this story has just gotten me addicted on them. Xenmas and Saix, I mean. You portray them quite well by 'Nobody' standarts, and yet cutely so.

Give me the wish to just strangle them out of frustration that they are dancing around each other and, consequently, hurting each other without noticing.

Good work, and if I didn't like your wording, I wouldn't be reading. -cheeky grin-

This is an amazing story! I adored the chapter :) It was NOT to wordy and you owned JK Rowling ;) Amazinging job! Update as soon as you can!
P.S.- I hope you feel better real soon!!

Um, I have no idea what anyone could even complain about with this chapter. To put it simply, it was mind-blowing awesome! Personally, I loved the description and believe that you have to have some major creativity prowess to write something like this. It was both equally funny and moving. The only thing I found wrong with it was a few word mix-ups, but those were few and far between. I can't wait for the next chapter! I hope the lawsuit resolves and you start feeling better. : ) If it makes you feel any better, I'm supposed to be writing two papers right now. ; )

Love it! Update soon :)

this is by far my favorite chapter by far. in your AN i saw that you thought you were over elaborating but with a complex world such as halloween town the way you were describing it fitted perfectly, i liked it. hope you get well soon.

I loved this chapter! The details of Halloween Town were very nice (I don't see why anyone would complain!) and it definitely gave it character. You haven't lost the humor, trust me, I died laughing at so many parts (especially when they finally retrieve Larxene). Also, OH NO NOT SAIX'S HAIR! The way Xaldin AND Xemnas reacted was priceless. But it was so sad that Xemnas hit Saix, totally built up the story and the tension when that happened. I can't wait to see what happens next.
On another note, I love your Vexen, too. He had one of the worst deaths ever (barbequed via Axel) and him getting a little bit of payback was great. I'm thinking Vexen would definitely like to rip Axel a new hole (so would Zexion I can imagine after he got his miserable death). I'm excited to see what will happen next! You're such a great writer and you definitely know how to make my day!
Hope that things get better for you as well (doing that many essays/projects/exams would make me bash my brains out, especially since you've been swine'd as well).

Actually, I was gonna say that you obviously put a lot of effort into this chapter, more so than others it seems, and that I found it very well written... And I'm terribly sorry to hear you have/had the swine flu! My little sister and I both caught it too, she was down for 2 weeks, I was out for 2 days...

So, Xigbar hid Vexen, Marluxia, and Larxene on the roof?! Oh dear lord! Larxene was probably calling the lightning down to her just to piss off Vexen! So, are there going to be any further mishaps with the dead, such as Roxas or someone finding Zexion and Lexeaus as they are clearing out the Underworld? Now there would be a wonderful situation to bring before Xemnas! (Imagines Demyx walking through the door with his line of "Look what followed me home!")

So, Roxas is going to be sent to fetch the Superior? Ok, I really feel sorry for him. He'll probably find him on the dark beach we see so often in the games and be subjected to a dastardly long and dull speech on loyalty and how you need to follow orders before getting a pat on the head and an order to get to bed because he looks exhausted and there'll be more missions in the morning.

Get well soon, and I hope you aren't in too bad of a mood or general discomfort! And update when you can! Good luck in classes too!

I both like this chapter and dislike it for almost the same reason, which is the xemnas and saix scene.

This chapter is very dramatic. You still include humor in this chapter in the form of Vexen, but at the same time it is becoming more and more dark and actually quite violent. Maybe you should change the genre to drama? I was never very good with those categories.

On a side note, they've managed to find Vexen and Larxene, but will they find one of the other two before Marluxia? I'm quite curious to see what the scientists role will be in this story now.

I will stop this review now before my "NOO MAKE THAT BAD WEREWOLF GET AWAY FROM SAIX" rant starts up. I'm just too loyal to xemsai to stand it ha. :)

Take a good rest, you deserve it.

If sickness and schoolwork can make you churn out this kind of writing, you should get sick and OD on Shakespeare more often. o_o I loved your elaborate descriptions and creative ideas about what Halloween Town and its residents are like, and every fun little detail its quirks and eccentricities was a treat for me. Even if most of it wasn't vitally essential to moving the plot along, I don't see why anyone would complain because you didn't stick to just the bare-bones necessities of storytelling.

I also love you've made Garmjaw such an endearing and important character without turning him into a Mary-Sue. Most of the time, an OC and a canon character kissing means that the fic had officially jumped the shark, but you pulled it off fantastically, IMHO.

I liked the 'wordy' scenes. :D
And the scenes with Vexen.
Especially the last one.
<3
:D

But... The whole... Non XemSai thing makes me sad.
;=;
I want them to be back together so bad. D:
But, again, good chappy. :D

This chapter was brilliant. I personally, loved all of the descriptions. I felt like I could really see what everyone else was seeing, if that makes sense.

The confrontation between Xemnas and Saix was brilliant. Both of the them were brilliant.

And ohmaigoodness, that last part was wonderful. I admit, I was kind of waiting for that to happen. Get 'im done, Garmjaw! 8D

I can't wait for the next chapter!

PS: Get better! I had the swine three weeks ago, and it was highly unpleasant. I feel for you.

I'm a long time follower, but I don't review when I really should. My apologies for that.

But darling, you should really give yourself a chance to rest up! Enjoy your mini-coma and come out feeling rejuvenated!

There's really no need to be worried about this chapter being too wordy or descriptive. This is some of your best quality work, and we, the readers adore your style so much that we'll take any extra sentence you're willing to write us regardless of whether it's humour or description, because most of what you write is just simply enthralling.

Really, I can sing your high praises all day. I've always admired your writing and love seeing how you grow with it. Unfortunately, this makes it hard for me to give much as far as constructive crit, which is unusual for my regular slightly pessimistic view on most things.

That said, this chapter is a nice small turn in this fic. What started as a seemingly simple humour fic is becoming progressively more dramatic (in parts), and the increased description is helping draw the readers in without being bombarded with a serious story right from the get-go. It's a wonderful transition and balance, I think, that you don't see too often, let alone done well.

It's also great to see Halloween Town being used to a fuller potential than the games were able to give it. The film has such a wonderfully large, ghoulish world to work with and it's a shame that Halloween Town is not expanded on more often. Personally, I'm rather indifferent of the world (story, game, or film), but I am thoroughly enjoying your rendition of it from the market setting and other villages to the annoyingly chatty and nearly-dimwitted citizens.

Must commend your portrayal on the characterizations and workings of the Organization members. 365/2 Days must certainly be feeding your brain all sorts of things. I finished it recently, and the first thing I did was tear it apart for being a filler, mission-based game. But now I'm finding myself fangirling over it. I guess I really got attached to the characters more than I thought I would in those 40 hours of gameplay. It was great to see the inside of the Organization and how they interacted with each other. Get a little more insight on everybody. But what you've written so far is wonderfully close. The only thing I'm really noticing apart from Saix being more chatty than I expected is Roxas not being as grounded by common sense as I had thought he would be. But it really comes as no surprise, I suppose, when you consider his naive take-it-as-it-is nature. At least now if you start adapting the in-game personalities, it won't be horribly obvious between chapters.

It may be the most important character development in the story, but when it comes to reviewing Saix, it's not something that I can really judge, since this is a *fanfic*. But for what it's worth, I think that you're describing it incredibly well and are making it very believable for his character. The differences that Xaldin notices, and how he interacts with the citizens and Garmjaw make complete sense based on what we've seen of Saix in-game.

Speaking of Garmjaw, can't forget to mention how you're great at so naturally incorporating OCs. And making them incredibly average and likable. At first I thought that maybe Garmjaw's attraction to Saix was sudden and too fast, but I can see where it fits with his character. I also don't think you could have slowed down that aspect of the story any more than you did. I'm enjoying the pace this story is going and really can't question anything else in this respect.

The antics so far in the story have been silly (although brilliant), and I'm curious to see what you have in mind for new schemes now that some old faces have been forced to enter the playing field.

This probably doesn't make up for all the chapters of your various stories I never reviewed, and I know it doesn't really give you much as far a food for thought, but I hope I was at least able to offer some encouragement and express part of why I follow your work.

Good recovery and I send you waves of inspiration and straight thinking!

P.S. The DBSK thing truly is sad. I'm not a huge fan or anything, but I do listen to some of their work and contracts and law-suit issues are never cool for any talented artist. And c'mon, you just don't find amazing boybands every day. Let's hope this gets sorted out soon so they can get back to their music and other projects.