   Nedjmet
2007-05-24 . chapter 1Aw!!
At first, I thought her mother was going to be Christine, and I was expecting some interesting recognition going on, but it was completely E/OC. Although, in this instance, that is far from being a complaint. Had the mother been Christine, it wouldn't have been so innocent, so sweet in its simplicity.
Actually, I tell a lie: at first I thought the child was Christine and that this would make an interesting prelude/prologue to something. But no, just the wanderings and musings of our favourite phantom. Sounded more Leroux than anything else. Was that what you were going for? If it was, it worked.
At risk of sounding patronising (which is far from my intent), my congratulations on your writing style. It's refined and mature, which is something often sadly lacking in fanfiction. It's so annoying to read a good storyline, or even good writing, only for the writer to lapse into a moment of obvious immaturity or out-of-place modernisms. I'm not trying to sound like a snob, and I'm not saying I'm a perfect writer - far from it as my beta keeps proving - I'm just trying to emphasise the compliment. Rather clumsily, but never mind. The point is: loved the writing style: makes and keeps the story interesting.
Anyhoo (why do all my paragraphs begin with 'a'?), saw your pen name and was intrigued. 'Twas most enjoyable, and I envy you your ability to be brief.
What are these drabbles contests? I keep hearing about them/reading descriptions saying oneshots are entries for them, but I remain in perpetual cluelessness. Based on what I read, I think you definitely should have one something. Thanks for the good read. Must go. Have a song scene to finish :) |
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