I think that your doing really good in writitng this story from a different point of veiw! I hope there's gonna be more.

write more

I like the idea of going back over the story from Zack's POV. Your first chapter of this story great and the action scene was very easy to read.

What an interesting concept and it works well. You can see the links between the two, but they aren't similar as the thought processes and extras show their contrasting views of the same situation. I am, intrigued to see how you continue this in future chapters, especially the Dee/Max confrontation and so on. Please continue this soon.

very well written. i love how you portray Zack. will this story go the events of L'HB? or is it just Zack's point of view? -really enjoying the story, post more ASAP