your writing is like poetry. i find it extremely refreshing and imaginative. i like how you are so emotionally descriptive, but you leave the physical and psycological (sp?) images to the reader to create. i'd be interested to see what you would write as a royia story, and not just a oneshot, although oneshots are my bread and butter. excellent work.

Very nice and subtle.

nice little ifc here

Very nice piece and this is actually one of the first times that I've read a take on this scenrio that is so well written and good. Bravo! I hope you write more FMA in the future...you have a knack for it. Great job on keeping them both so in-character!

I guess many have tried on this kind of relationship between Roy and Riza but yours is a new perspective. I've read many of those and this is unique. I really like it. I also like the choice of words. It compliments the whole fic itself.

I would just like to make a comment on this:

Like fossils and ancient relics dug up from the earth, his troubled mind conjures up images – of blood (the stains that he sees on his hands, even when they appear clean),... [until this paragraph ends]

Maybe you could take the sentences/words out of the parenthesis. I guess if you do that, it gives more of a dramatic and angst-y feeling to the paragraph. When in the parenthesis, they just seem to be a part of something else. I hope you get what I mean.

I really like this fic of yours. I like your take on this kind of perspective in their relationship. Keep on writing. I'm not that much of a writer myself but I've seen many good pieces of literature. And this one is one of those pieces. Great job!

Erinn~