This is beautiful

bravo

I have never read such a well done story about Goyle, those where he is only pretending to be stupid don't count.

You have a gift for telling the old tales in new settings. May I recommend reading up on the tales of my people. You might find them intreging and perhaps base a story from them.

I am Polish mostly although my grandmother was Romani. Those stories are a tad different from the Germanic ones you're used to. By Germanic I mean English, Irish, French, Italian, and German.

Oh, nice.

That was really cute, actually. I liked it.

'Twas an interesting ship... I'd never seen it before :) You did very well on a ship that I would never have thought of.

Good job

That was right amazing. Thank you :)

I'd have chose the other, with no hesitation. What is humankind to me?

Another excelent story...really now, why don't you start writting you own book...

I like it. The idea that Goyle is secretly a troll to Luna's fairie. It draws on their apparent personality & quirks.

I especially liked how he intereacted with the earth & the earthy metaphors/descriptions. The only thing is that it took a while to know what you meant by "old people." My first reaction was to think of druids.

Well, I suppose everybody has to make a choice similar to that some time or other - a choice between the real world and Faerie; and probably the "right" choice is the one Greg makes here... A rite of passage, in someways, see C.G. Jung.
An absolutely amazing story, in all.
"Justice for Crabbe and Goyle!"

An interesting system of what is obviously to be more and more powerful folloers of the Dark Lord, with the perfect anti-climax of Crabbe, alone and wandless.
I know about mock-turtles, but mock-wolves??

A beautiful mini-chapter. Very lyrical, and the chiasmic sentence structure is quite ingenuous. Of course it can't last, otherwise this would be the last chapter...

Your Luna is amazing as always. And it's fascinating how Goyle, the more he becomes one of the Old People, also becomes more HUMAN... And then stunning his father! You never cease to surprise your reader!
A few teacher's notes, this time:
A beach is the edge of the sea, a brook has banks
undergrowth, not -vegetation
dreamily, not dreamingly
futile is the adjective, the noun that you need is futility
bars form a cage, hence barred - when you show your teeth they are bared

Old People, eh? Not exactly the same as the Fair People... Nobody would ever connect Goyle (or Crabbe) with the concept of fair, certainly. So, there is not much room left... I believe JKR herself gives the clue somewhere. Also the the extremely simple language with most words of just a single syllable fits very nicely - and not only in the dialogue but also in the (very sparse) narrative passages. Very clever handling of style and expression.

I loved this, I don't know why. It's a crazy love story between a fairy and a troll and I loved it.

Oh, beautiful. I didn't think they'd make that decision, but I suppose I hope that they did. Wonderful story.

Ha. I rarely think of Goyle and Crabbe in such individual terms, but this is a nice ironic ending.