I Not see the end comeing. Thank You, that was Good.

OMG that was GREAT!

Cute. Very cute.

That was an unexpected ending. But this was cute.

Lizwin fluff!

loved it update soon

aw, i loved the little twist. :] it's a great story.

LOL! Really cute, if the fact of them being steps and all didn't creep me out I mean. But that's not really your fault is it! lol!

hey that was just uber cute and awesome are u sure it's ur first time? ; ) haha good job keep writing

That was so cute!

aw that's actually cute!

aw. the whole way i was like she is supposed to be with ed, and look at that all along she was. when i started, i thought that, but as i kept reading, it really sounded like they werent until obviously the end. awesome story and i like how derek fit is - saying ed was jealous (having two meanings - that he "isn't" with her and he wants a girl) which rox. awesome story.

not your best? you nailed all of them. well done

Hello-

That was a pretty adorable story. I like the protective older brother Derek, and Edwin's reaction to Lizzie having a boyfriend at the beginning of the story.

A couple of your sentences were kind of awkward though, such as the last sentence:

Giggles in between at the fact that they fooled Derek.

I think I understand the final sentence thing you were going for(of course I could be completely wrong), but I think you have too many words. I don't really know how to fix it, because it's more of a style issue, but I though I'd point that out.

Anyway, I really liked this story. Good job.

Cheers,

Ariadne Oliver

Very cute! Well done! Hope to see more stories from you soon :)