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"so famous and yet so humble, so successful and yet so down-to-earth" -like the character description
I still really adore the flashback to the King and Lynda when they were younger, and how they met at the party. particularly this- “Well, that puts me at a disadvantage,” he said, still smiling. “Here you know me, but I don’t know you.” -very charming. You made me fall in love with the King!

"...And in a dark place of pain, a beleaguered green car heard..." -ooh nice descriptive angst!

I really enjoyed Lightning's take on things. Your narrative voice is very dramatic (in a good way) amd the emotions came across really well. I might have liked to see a bit more dialogue, but meh that's just personal opinion.

“I don’t believe that. Chick was many things, but not a murderer.” -wow this line is amazingly similar to mine in the last chapter. I'm going to say now I didn't read this until after I'd finished writing the chapter! ^^;;
Anyways I really enjoyed it, even more than the other version. Please keep up this great work :)
btw, I'll review the rest of this story when I get time, promise!

Such an incredible epilouge! You did a great job with this, honestly. You've brought goosebumps throughout my body with the way you wrote and presented this. There is so much inside, said and not said, that makes it truely perfect. I do not know how to explain how I feel. Dread, sympathy. I could feel Lynda's pain and Sheriff's sorrow. I'm sure you've brought the rest of your readers through their emotions like you've done with me. I thoroughly enjoyed this.

-Kelsey

Oh wow, I love it! The epilogue I think wrapped everything up perfectly. It kinda gave a look as to what else was going on without taking away from the original story. Sort of a look at just how much grief it all caused. Awsome story!

Maji

Review of Epilogue:
I love this, as I think I mentioned in an email! -waves- you really capture Sheriffs and Lynda’s heartache with all the descriptive language.
“Oh gee,” it said. “What can you do?” -love that, puts you in the moment and you can really visualise it.

"She’d sat in her room, listening to the loud music and the voices which grew louder and louder as the gasohol flowed freely" - whe, rebellious teen cars! Love this, actually love the whole flashback. It was so cute and adorable.

I have couple of tiny little bits of con-crit (since you asked!). This line- "To distract herself (as if that were possible)" - you could have worded that bit without the brackets; I find it can take you out of the moment if you’re going for something emotion-heavy, like this. But that’s just my own personal preference, so it’s all fine really :)

and "She sobbed quietly, as the other two cars looked on helplessly." Again, my own personal opinion; you might have worded it “...looked on, helpless.” because you’ve already got that other “ly” when she’s sobbing, and it can sometimes sound a bit much on the description- I do that too much ^^;;

anyway these were only tiny little things, and only because you asked for the con-crit too. otherwise, they were insignificant, I just really enjoyed this overall. It was well written and the dialogue was realistic.
And-
"It took some doing, but by morning, what was left of the King was in Doc’s office, covered by a sheet." -ooh. You cruel person! Extremely effective though :)

Boy that last chapter was sadder than the other one. Although I must admit that I was expecting Chick to wake up in his room and find that it was all a nightmare; but that was still written well and emotional. Usually I can't stand heartbreaking endings; too much for me to bear. But at least everyone was touched by both deaths, despite what Chick did.

Still like it. Writing about Lynda is always a good idea, because she's such a neglected character. Although the Lightning/Sally bit was cute too.

Excellent!
A very realistic story.
A murder mystery, and no one knows that Chick killed the King. I like the way McQueen dosn't think that Chick killed the King. He believes what he wants to, but really has no idea! Or does he?
Look forward to your next fic!

What are you talkin' about girl? You've gotten 3 (now 4) good reviews for the epilouge! I love your story and don't let anyone (especially yourself) talk you into thinkin' otherwise. Keep up your writin' just how you are and people (including me) will continue to read your work! Talk to ya soon! (E-mail or Carsfanfic...lol...lotsa parenthesis).

~HH~

This epilogue cleared things up quite a lot for me. I'm not really sure what I think to this one. It's certainly different.

'What if?' huh? I look forward to reading your next story.

OMG!... Omgomgomg...

That is so creepy! And good! And creepy still at the same time... You are so good at writing tragedies. I was listening to "False Pretense" By Red Jumpsuit Apparatus while I read this, and it ACTUALLY goes with it pretty well... Weird...

Lol, keep up with the writing!

That really hurt. It was ... you've kind of rendered me speechless. The reference to the Reaper was wonderful, and the lake of fire... sigh. I'm scared of it too, and I hate it for that reason, and I wish you hadn't written it, but dramatically there was no other way the story could have ended, so my personal preferences are neither here nor there. The final sentences, each in its own little paragraph, are extremely powerful.

"And then, just like the King, Chick Hicks knew what it felt like to burn.

He screamed until he had no voice left.

And he knew his torment would never end.

It's really such a shame, because there was that one moment when everything could have changed. How about an alternate ending? One where Chick accepts the King's invitation to talk?? I'd so love that.

*sigh*

What a story! Fire scares me too I can't even use a lighter. Your story was awesome to read!

Oh, just blasted past these first chapters and had to say something! Am here from the Pixar Planet forum, BTW. I think this is very, very strong and well-written. I loved the glimpse into Hicks' past and his run-in with those hypocritical kids. You've got me so sorry for hiim and I can't wait for more!

Not quite what I expected, but it was good, nevertheless.