Wow, beautiful. I really loved it, showed both's thoughts withought being even the slitghtest bit ooc. I really enjoy the song (Don't fear) the reaper by H.I.M. as well as Blue Oyster Cult. check it out. Anyway, it was a beautiful story

wowzer. i am speechless. that was really good for a second there i actually felt bad for edward rather than laughing at his patheticness (spelling?). there were a couple of grammar errors but you were writing with Stephanie Meyer's characters in mind so some of her mind numbingly bad writing skills had to rub off... luckily they were minimal (that was an insult not to you please dont go crazy or corgi on me lady) (hee hee that was funny) anyways... the way that you tied the song in was really well done. how it didnt make sense in the beginning but at the end you totally made me have an "oh" actually more like "oh" moment. nicely done. you continue to amaze me oh might puppet master.

I love itish... It's amazing!! But they both die! Romeo and Juliet modern day! XD It's great but it makes me see that you really don't despise twilight! If you had hated twilight, you wouldn't want anything to do with it, but you hated it and read both books, and than wrote a story about it, I'd say you secretly like it, but are just afraid to say so. XD

omg your so awesome especially since you used a song by my favorite bang in the whole world which i am obsessed over! swet HIM ROCKS AND SO DO YOU LOL

omg michelle is here! i love that song. how are you? oh by the way i think i dont want to finish my story. do you want to finish it for me?! haha really though well see you on monday!

i really liked it! the song fit really well, and i love alternate (okay, twisted) endings, like where they both die. i wouldn't want for it to have actually happened in the book, but its interesting to think about what couldve happened. virtual cookie to you!

I like this. I think it could stand to be a little longer, and a little more descriptive. There's a big blank between Bella's Cliffdiving, and Edward stepping into the sun...but that's probably because that would be harder to write in the style you're writing.

Although, you probably could have writing something about while Bella was on the plane.

I think you ended it at a good spot, though.

All in all, this is good. It's about a 4 out of 6. I usually don't give anything other than 2s and 3s. The only sixes I give out go on my favorites list...although a few 5s make it there too.