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| yeroandfae714 2007-12-09 ch 10,  | abusethis chapter is really cute! and glinda and boq are adorable. please update! |
| Wiztine 2007-11-13 ch 10, | abuseIs there more? It stopped at "he muttered something unintelligible". I hate my computer sometimes. |
| Wiztine 2007-11-13 ch 9, | abuseNo! Coffee does not cure hangovers! ... Ahem... sorry, Health class is really starting to bug me. I was so happy to see another chappie. (though I know this isn't it) |
| quantuminferno 2007-11-09 ch 9, | abuseWow... I love your fic. I just saw the musical and now I haven't been very successful in finding fics I like; however, this one's awesome. Pure awesome-ness. I can't wait to see what happens next! |
| Dark Rose Of The Black Para... 2007-09-17 ch 1, | abuseHey, this is great. I knwo the story is Gloq and Fiyeraba but this was a very good Gelphieish chapter, which I liked. |
| 0xRENTxOZxHeadx0 2007-08-05 ch 9, | abuseGood story please continue |
| Phantomfr33k24601 2007-08-02 ch 3, | abuseJust a few helpful hints. Try breaking up the page when you switch P.O.V.s ( point of views). It just helps to orient the reader. If Fiyero's examining something, and then all the sudden Boq is doing the thinking, it gets really messed up. So just try breaking the page up with x or something. It's very helpful to the readers. Also, try putting commas between two verbs. I usually put too many commas in a story, so I might not be the best person ever to listen to, but it's kinda helpful to have “Alright, after you Miss Galinda,” Boq said, gesturing for her to move on ahead of him. instead of “Alright, after you Miss Galinda,” Boq said gesturing for her to move on ahead of him. It just breaks the sentance up nicely and makes it easier to read, in my opinion. Anyways, good job, and keep going. ^^" |
| Phantomfr33k24601 2007-08-02 ch 2, | abuseYAY. Nice chapter. ^^" I like the Elphaba/alcohol thing. That's funny. The only thing I noticed is that for the flashback, it REALLY confused me for a second. It might be helpful to put any further flashbacks into italics, just so everyone's not like 'Wtheck?' and all that. Other than that though, it was very nice. ^^" |
| Phantomfr33k24601 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseI love 'This is me not caring!' That's hilarious. A lot of the rest is really funny too, but that part just makes the chapter amazing for me. The emotions are really good, and nice descriptions on the characters, keeping them canon and everything. -thumbs up- |
| xxAnnaleigh 2007-07-20 ch 8, | abuseGalinda is in L O V E LOVE Haha when is there going to be more Fiyeraba fluff! |
| Geordie Jedi 2007-07-20 ch 8, | abuseSo does it look like Galinda might be falling for Boq? I hope this happens. Another good chapter, update soon. |
| xxAnnaleigh 2007-07-14 ch 7, | abuseYay my name is mentioned =D Good chapter!! Gloq fluffyness! Yay! |
| Geordie Jedi 2007-07-14 ch 7, | abuseAnother great chapter, I wonder if Galinda will get together with Bog? Please update soon. |
| xxAnnaleigh 2007-07-07 ch 6, | abuseAw poor Galinda Update soon please |
| Kennedy Leigh Morgan 2007-07-02 ch 5, | abuseAww, that was wonderful! I love the Fiyerabaness of course. And Elphie's memory of her mother was great too. I like seeing her musicalmother portrayed as more attentive and loving. Can't wait for more! |