nice

haw haw haw (x3) how cute in the omake part! luv it :DD

Whoa. I fondly remember this fic too, and I had no idea you wrote this one as well as Tropical Butterfly. Sheesh, I should've reviewed ages ago.

I really do like how you write Natalia - very accessible and easy to sympathize with. At the same time, you don't ignore her failings, such as the often too-narrow focus that puts her in danger. And even if it never happens in-game, I think Natalia's choleric enough to um, force feed someone a potion. She can be kinda scary. Could totally happen.

All the characters' voice sound authentic, particularly Jade's offhand snark and Asch's stubborness.

Crit (Again, I know it's an older fic and so probably doesn't reflect your current talent, but critting is part of what I do.):

some comma typos

As for the omake, while it nicely gratifies the AschxNatalia shipper in me, him waking her up with a kiss is stretching it, especially this early in the game. She might not even feel confident enough to fall asleep in his room at that point.

End crit.

I'm glad I found this one again too. I've always remembered these stories as being two of my favorite ToA fics - they just have a great blend of prose, characterization, sweetness and humor.

A sweet and slightly funny story. I like it.

C-A

Haha so clever, I love your one-shots.

What a cute one shot! Asch & Natalia are my favorite couple from Tales of the Abyss, and you portray them really well. 3

Lovely. I enjoyed it.

So cute!

aw so cute! .

It was a super idea ! Asch x Natalia forever

O.o! LMAO! Ah, dear, I don't beleive I have laughed that much in a long whileXD I must say that the Omake is my favorite out of this story and Asch fainting from his first kiss(?) comes in 2nd place. Overall, Love it;D

Hehe, this fanfic made me giggle like a mad fangirl. Asch was a bit out of character with that "Sleeping Beauty" line, but we don't know how wicked can a God General be for the sake of revenge.

I liked it a lot though. I am more of a GuyxNatalia fan since Guy has the obvious advantage of not dying in the end; but your fanfic is so cute.

And women should be more forward. D

This was really cute. Good work!

This is such a cute story! It resembles their relationship very well. And you expressed Asch's stubborness very well too. Good job! :)

Haha, what a way to end this fic. I can't see Asch calling anyone 'Sleeping Beauty' though.

LOL! Natalia made Asch faint! From the shock or something? ) Natalia is as bossy as ever...I wonder if she realized that she actually kissed him.

Now that you think about it, what does life bottles do, I mean if the character fainted, they can't possibly drink the vial right?

Cute. Great job ) Yay to more AschxNatalia fics.