ohh..that was great!...huhuhu..sob...poor asch!he doesn't have a home anymore...hikz...he is so mean but inside is kind!o i love u asch!i will be your big fans forever!

omg that was so good! luv it!

I really liked it!

Write more stories! :D

Dude, lady, I love it. It was nice to get into Asch's head for that part- it was one of my favourites.

Just one issue, sometimes it felt like we weren't really in Asch's head, like we didn't see what Asch was really feeling. I mean, we saw what he was thinking, but not really how he was feeling. It draws readers out of the story when we have to make up how the character is feeling. That's all.

Aw, that was cute! And for some reason, I really liked the line, "and took pleasure in the fact that it would give him another headache." Sadistic-Bastard!Asch is so much fun. :D

My only criticism would be that at parts, it just seemed like copy paste with a few "he said/she said"s thrown in. Put in more of Asch's thoughts, maybe; I liked those. Also, your word choice was a bit repetitive in a few places.

Other than that, it was pretty good. :) The scene between his parents was really sweet.

I think you more than did it justice. You have such a talent for writing dialogue.