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| tiny-pixie 2007-10-09 ch 1,  | abuseLogan:"Don't be sorry. Trust me, a part of me is loving it." She smacks his shoulder. "Ow!" Max:"typical male" had me crackin up i cud actually see that happenin Oh and when he left her in the shower and shouted "love you too!!" hilarious You definately succeeded in capturing their characters down to the bickering :) Great job |
| yalena10 2007-07-28 ch 1, | abusevery funny story i can't believe logan left max in the shower Poor guy, so loving it |
| Babyangel86 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuselol, short sweet and oh so funny! :-) |
| shywr1ter 2007-07-01 ch 1, | abuseGrinning again, here! (and sorry for delay in reviewing!) What a great little snapshot of 'angst' of a very different sort! I really like the sense of fun in this and your way of expressing it. And you know, Logan being a guy, this is perfect: "Don't be sorry. Trust me, a part of me is loving it." She smacks his shoulder. "Ow!" And the last line is great: "Love you too!" he calls back before collapsing face down on the bed. Not for the first time, he thinks that being in love with a transgenic might be the death of him." Keep all the DA coming-- you do such a lovely job with these two! |
| Jeanetteg 2007-05-31 ch 1, | abuseOkay.. That's a great start so continue. How is Logan going to last her heat cycle if he's tired after three times? He's got two days or so...:} How does he remedy it and keep himself alive at the same time. Jeanette |
| Lisa0316 2007-05-31 ch 1, | abuseHILARIOUS! This was a lot of fun. I like to think that fifteen minutes later Logan got his strength back, but I'm an optimist... |
| intstebri 2007-05-31 ch 1, | abuseNew ML writer? Good, very very good,thank you to write about them. What could I say? I never see the shower came! "fifteen minutes..." I think I will laugh all these 15! Very good! Keep writing please. |
| Griever11 2007-05-31 ch 1, | abuseMax pouts playfully. "What? Don't you want me?" "I just had you," he says, his voice almost a growl. "Three times. Tonight. And unlike you, I'm only human." That was hilarious! I like this. Really really do! |