I like it you should continue it sorry fo r my spelling

with an exasperating expression

[exasperated?]

He said he come but…"

[That sounds OOC – Ranma is many things (a jerk being one of them), but he’s also got a sense of honor and what he does is avoid promising for a date. He doesn’t say “yes” and not come, he refuses to say “yes” (which, yes, isn’t much better, but he IS “between a rock and a hard place”)]

continuing to ride her bicycle

[What’s the guy doing, running to catch up? Bikes are built for a reason: they allow you to efficiently cross comparatively long distances and faster than on foot. If Shampoo continues riding, he’d have to keep up somehow. Now if she had stopped at a corner (maybe for a train or just cross traffic), then this would make sense]

As she's having dialogues with this stranger

[dialog]

Shampoo stared at her with rage,

[OOC: Shampoo is more generally snooty and demeaning to Akane, she doesn’t burst into a rage on seeing her rivals]

but he was too strong, she was unable to move away from his hands.

[Why, did he grip her? You didn’t say so]

We got to find that guy!" Akane said.

"How? Shampoo not know him!"

[Look, both Shampoo and Akane are using improper grammar! *sigh*]

"We no tell others about switching, just pretend be Shampoo for while."

[Even Shampoo can’t be stupid enough to seriously propose an idea like that. They have far different behavior and knowledge bases]

Akane, looking helpless,

[looked helpless.]

unlike being the real Shampoo

[What about him being uncomfortable with Shampoo’s extremely forward behavior when he’s extremely shy?]

Chapter 2

The real character is listed in ,

[Something important is missing]

AkaneShampoo almost got revealed since she still got that 'Shampoo' accent.

[That is EXTREMELY awkward, not only the double name which isn’t extremely clarifying (I’d rather see a longer “Shampoo in Akane’s body” or something) but also the grammar/phrasing]

attempting to get close to him.

[Superfluous information: if she can’t find him, she can neither “get closer” nor screw things up]

is she out of her minds?'

[People don’t usually have multiple minds]

"I…I lost them." ShampooAkane lied,

[If they switched bodies, shouldn’t they have the keys that USED to be on the ‘other’ girl? It’s not like they switched purses so they kept their original keys before parting]

took off her shoes and walks inside.

[Inconsistent verb tense]

know it's odd that Shampoo would finish a sentence without grammar errors.

[Like yours? Seriously, grammar errors are appearing almost once-per-paragraph (sometimes more). I also want to point out that Shampoo’s JAPANESE is flawed – I’d like to see how YOUR second, third, or fourth language would be when you’ve only had two or three months of time to educate yourself in it. She speaks Mandarin perfectly fluently, and if you listen to the Japanese dub she only has an accent (with occasional misuse of personal and impersonal pronouns, why VIZ decided to give her such butchered grammar in English is beyond me)]

she came up excuses and lied to herself.

[Repetition]

Cologne's suspiciousness about

[suspicion]

I found it's quite confusing, but that's acceptable since the title is "Alteration Confusion", right?

[No, it’s confusing because the grammar is terrible, the characterization is inconsistent with either canon or your own story, and you give extremely little description of setting or characters. We don’t have any precise information on who, what, or how]

If you have difficulty with basic English, that’s understandable. That’s why there are Beta Editors to help you check your own writing.

Please update soon... I want to know how the story unfolds...

"‘Since Shampoo become Akane, Ranma not afraid Shampoo anymore, Shampoo not a cat, not cursed. But Akane…’ she didn’t let herself think anymore, if she goes further, she might have her sympathy on Akane."

Oh, I'm eager to see what happens when Shampoo comes into contact with coldwater. Do continue.

let me put it bluntly: you need someone to edit your papers. The story is great, and it's an excellent idea, but you seem to have a problem with past, present, and future tense. You are continually switching between the three, and it makes the story less than what it could be should you fix the errors. anyway, good job, cant wait to read the next chapter! :)

just a question?wouldnt shampoo try just a little to speak normal, and shouldnt akane try to speak broken japanese at least? funny idea

I like this story. Hey, why not include a chapter with Mousse? Shampoo would treat him nicer than the real Shampoo, right?

When shampoo thinks, she will think with correct grammar as she is thinking in Chinese. Why is Cologne being so nice?

It's not fair to end it there! write more!

sou desu ka.. GO AKANE!

Well, i like it. Ranma is dense, so he won't notice for a while, but what about Mousse? He can't see so he'd figure it out in a hurry, even if it takes the rest of the town a while.

I liked how Cologne was suspicious. It wouldn't be beliveable if people who knew Akane and Shampoo didn't see they're acting weird

i like your fanfic! continue it soon! can't wait for the next chapter!

not too shabby. different concept and i look forward to reading more chapters in the future. thank you.

Interesting idea, keep going. This has good potential.

looks like u took care of the who's who's problem very well. I didn't find it confusing, please continue