Work on this story please. It is really interesting

I had been waiting for you to post the story but I guess you forgot it?

Good beginning. Make it longer!

this has potential. like there's nothing wrong with it. except i'd like the chapters to be longer and i'd like you to give it a proper title and i'd like there to be some more detail. just a little. other than that, this story rocks! you should totally continue real soon! thank you much!

-BabyGirl

Ps. I actually put the 'Ps.' after my signature thing for once!
Pps. This story is definitely going into my favorites...

Sounds like the start of an interesting story. If you continue with this, you may want to have the next chapter(s)about how she came into the world and some family background. As for a story title, how about "The Power of Black's Daughter". Just a thought. Post again.

It sounds interesting; I would like to read it.