That was terrific. The fandom needs more YugaHaya stories.
Great work. This is totally realistic and IC; you wrote it excellently.

I admire you. You actually have the ability to make something to terrible twist into something beautiful. That's not all I have to say tho. Being a major fan of Hayate, I have to say, that I wouldn't even find the ability to write a fic like that up. Yea, this is coming from the person who writes semi intense stuff.

either way, figuratively or literally, you're an influence to writers like me.

truly,
ferret-nin

ps: i don't plan to put it in my favs b/c his death really upsets me. I don't know y. it's just something bout him that's so...memorable. reason of reading: i'm just morbid like that. can't go to alerts for stories, since it's a one-shot. author alert, dunno. sorry. too long of a review. hehehe...^^;

Very nice!
But poor Hayate! Waking up in the middle of the night being unable to breath must be really horrible!
And poor Yuugao! But it suits her character that this helplessness is really making her furious.
The ambiguity of the word "patient" was a great idea and made a well fitting ending.

Aw that is so sweet but tragic of a story. It was really well written too, I could feel her pain as she goes through the night. Beautiful work!

Yuugao's pain and helplessness towards Hayate's illness was potrayed very well in this piece and I can't help but feel pity for her. Well done.

This made me smile, it's so sweet and yet so tragic.