This short story is also beautiful. I could just /feel/ Raidou's panic, and ... just about everything in this fic was incredibly well-written. Honestly, I'm at a loss for words...

M-B, over and out

P.S.: I'm rarely at a loss for words...

This was such a heartrending story that I almost cried *sniffles*. Very well written..I loved it. Thanx XD

You've done an absolutly wonderful job, and the ending is good. The story's not overworked, despite its length (thats hard to not over work a oneshot once it goes past about 5k)... and I didn't notice any major flaws. Amazing job.

Wow, that was really awesome! It's the first story I read in this fandom and I'm really amazed!
You have a great way of describing the atmosphere. First there was this bad feeling Genma had, then there was this shocked, nearly apathetic Raidou and all the time I was sitting here thinking "Oh my god, what the hell happened to them?"
The idea of letting Raidou find out the truth through television was great - I don't know, if they have any TV in Konoha^^ but I like the idea^^
Genma's shock after seeing and hearing himself on TV was very well described, too. First I was worried that everthing would turn out worse at the end because Raidou was THAT worried (pills, hospital, etc.) but finally there was a happy end.
Really great work!

Your writing style is so amazing, I can't get enough of it. This is another wonderful story... you always manage to get into the minds and hearts of the characters.

I love this! I hope you write more Gen/Rai in the future!

That was...powerfully evocative. Good job on the descriptions, etc.

Very nice :)

I really liked this, very well-written and very believable, kudos!

Not bad at all. Very nice, actually. You have put a lot of emotion in this.
~Nait

Hey you! I haven't reviewed in a while, sorry about that. Been off the radar lately. But I came back to and found this scrumptious piece of fiction waiting and I'm so happy! Love it! Your narrative style has improved so, so much and I'm absolutely blown away. You've always been a good writer, but now I truly think you're a great one. The utter dysfunctionality (which, apparently, isn't a word) of your little family is beautifully shown in a completely understandable way. Considering none of your readers are likely ninjas dealing with death-defying situations on a daily basis themselves, I think this is quite an accomplishment. :-) I look forward to whatever you write in the future (but I'm especially looking forward to your return to your kakashi/iruka fics)! However, I'm equally impressed with your fleshing out of minor characters (I especially like Genma, Raido, and Hayate) in the Naruto verse. Thanks so much for your efforts!
--Kohinyun

*crying* That was so sad! I loved it though... You did an awesome job... *sniffles* I loved it!

oo, I loved it. I couldn't find anything wrong in it for me anyways. You've inspired me to go back and tackle the one fic I've let sit unfinished. GReat job. It made my insides squirm.

cdk

OMG this was such a good story! I LOVED it! It's such a rare paring (which is all to bad in itself really) because they are so cute together!

Wow. This is so beautiful...
I can see you've been working on it for so long. Every little detail is perfect. The pain is so tense you can almost touch it, but it's still so loving. Great, great job!
I've read it twice now (and more will t be) and I'll defenitely put it among my favs!