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Lucifer's Garden 2007-10-09 ch 1,	abusePure art. I loved it. :)
icebreather 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abuseI'm in awe of this. It hits all the right angst notes, and then the ending had just enough positivity to keep me from crying.
xxBuffyfreakxx 2007-06-28 ch 1,	abuseGreat work, i really enjoyed it :D
Anonymous 2007-06-24 ch 1, anon.	abuseGood development. Nice use of use of dialog. Good shot at dialect, too. Interesting premise, but I'm still not sure I can buy River overcoming her well-justified mistrust and dislike for Jayne. I also have trouble believing Simon would forget River's birthday, no matter how wrapped up he is in Kaylee (unless you meant something else?). Please get a beta and continue to work on word usage. Examples: You have either confused the word serendipity with serenity, or have developed a poetic construct that doesn't work in context. Using "coo" instead of "coup," or possibly "coups," (pronounced the same) is jarring. "Shinny" is a way to climb a tree - you meant "shiny." Jayne seems much more likely to smell like a dusty "saloon" than a "salon." Many bonus points for consistent correct usage of "its" and "it's," though!
fairyeyez27 2007-06-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseSo, i went over there to read it, but i've come to love livejournal more than has failed me...)so now i'm back here to tell you i lurve you. I've been needing me some Rayne loving (which is odd, cuz these days i lean distinctly towards slash... but those two are just too perfect for each other aren't they?) and you've fullfilled the craving wonderfully :) its was just maybe slightly to angsty for me.. but it ended happily so that all good! and there's my whole denial that certain thigs like book and wash dying in serenity actually happened... ah well... -huggles you- thanks for sharing.
hereswith 2007-06-04 ch 1,	abuseI loved your River here, and it's beautifully written. Great work.
meahra 2007-06-04 ch 1,	abusehot dang! I think this is now my favorite fic in the verse. I love it. Are you going to write a follow up? Please?
michebabyblue 2007-06-04 ch 1,	abuseThis is a really well written story i wonder if you are going to make a continuence with this or just leave it here, anyway it's a differnet sort of River then most after the Miranda wave and it was interessting to read.
BlueEyedBrigadier 2007-06-03 ch 1,	abuseGotta say...you offer up quite the plausible scenario with River having more secrets in her head of an importance equal or greater than Miranda. That and what happened to Earth. Also have to say that you wrote River brilliantly, especially when it came to her painful sadness/confusion about love...and her "hatred" of Jayne. I would imagine Jayne's obvious expression of emotion would be that much harder for River...getting it fullbore, compared to what she gets from the rest of the crew:(
eryn 2007-06-03 ch 1, anon.	abusewow! that was beautiful - i love the flow of it. "'I know how you move now.' He comments, off back, casual, like he hasn’t been inside her and tasted her. 'I’m intimate with it.'" AWESOME! thanks for sharing - i'd love to read more
SpiritualEnergy 2007-06-03 ch 1,	abuseGah! wiggles You are amazing. Seriously. I loved this so much. It was so vague and strange and sad and... so River! Yet you still managed to show us how she feels about what goes on around her, like with Wash and Miranda and it was just... wow. And I like how you explained River and Jayne's relationship -- how there was still a score to settle. And how she grew to love him. Thank you, thank you, thank you for the wonderful fic! I :HEART: you!
White Silence 2007-06-03 ch 1,	abuseThat was wonderful. Like uncontrollable falling but with a little cushion at the bottom.
Jackie 2007-06-03 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis is the first fanfic I have ever read that made me want to review it. You are a wonderful writer, and I absolutely LOVED your story. You got the voices of everyone down perfectly, and didn't do what most people do which that I really hate, i.e., make River crazier than an acid-tripping monkey. Or talk about herself in the third person. I never understand why people do that. She only had one line in the entire series (movie included) where she does that. I also liked how you made the relationship progress in what is probably the most realistic portrayal of Rayne I have ever seen. So, thank you. It was beautiful and I really hope you make a sequal.
HeyTeach 2007-06-03 ch 1,	abuseWow! That was some gripping tale. I wish there was going to be more. The angst was overwhelming - I just wanted it to go on and on.
FabledFigment 2007-06-03 ch 1,	abuseThis had some nice moments. There is nothing wrong with fluff. No one can be angry all the time.

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