Another good chapter! I like how your developing this story. It's a lot of fun to read lucia's perspective on things. You do a good job of writing what she thinks! I'm definatly looking forward to reading the next chapter! Good job. _

YAY! kaitoxLucia! gotta luv that pair _! hm thiss seems REALLY good! i cant wait to see the next chapter! _!

That was a good start! I liked the idea of the story being told through Lucia's POV. It was a bit short, but hey, it was only the first chapter after all! Anyway, in the next chapter try and slow things down a bit, also try adding some greater detail. The first chapter seemed a sorta empty and bit rushed. Please don't take these comments in a negative way, I just want to see you and your story improve, thats all. I'll be keeping my eye on this story and I hope to see the next chapter soon!