That's horrible! jk. Sora becoming the bad guy...have you read numina's Pandora Box?

o plz update its awesome

no is was IN character.I guess peace does him tha specially when he had as you say,taste the kinda bored after all the ,please updated soon.I think thsi is great

Wow.

That was awesome.

I love the concept, and the way it's written is really... really nice. It's great. Love it.

Ooh... Kinda creepy, and yet, oddly plausible. Scarily plausible, in fact. If Squeenix weren't chained to Disney, they might conceivably do something like that.

...sigh...

I enjoyed reading your first chapter, please keep writing, I would like to know what happens. :):):):):):)

holycrapilovethis

So good- so EMOTIONAL!

i mean, I can so see him doing ALL of that! He just got so used to people depending on him for the past two years... and then nobody needed him anymore, and he just wanted to be needed! Poor Sora...

and the drawing of the heartless.

and the opening of the door!

so yeah. This equals awesome.

Wow, that was excellent. Very introspective and just plain good.

Only mistake: You need a question mark where Kairi asks why Sora drew that in the ground.

Besides that, excellent.

Good work.

"That was the problem.

There was no need for him anymore."

Those two lines most affected me in this sad, powerful little oneshot. It's a surprising line to me, because, in truth, I never really consider that Sora wouldn't feel needed, after all was said and done. But this oneshot in its entirety made me think, and so I really enjoyed it, no matter how melancholy it was. Because, definitely, it's either one or the other, Sora feeling tired of his duty (which I like to portray, ) or Sora wanting more than what he has in front of him, as you so skillfully reflected on in this story. Nice job, and very emphatic. It was a beautiful oneshot.

You might think that this is OOC, but I really love this story.

Writers seldom think about the consquences of the canon storyline. With Sora fics, either he is completely out of control manic depressive or he is whining about Riku or Kairi. I like to think of the consequences of his warrior life. It's not that easy to shift from one way of life to the other.

Please keep writing, you have so much talent!

PS: Mind if I C2 this?

Oh...Creepy and oddly believeable.

Not bad, if you contenuded this fanfic then it could make an intresting story.

The last line-to be specific, the: "If he mattered?" line-just doesn't fit. I the the line previos-the: "Sora stood before the opened gates of Kingdom Hearts."-seemed more dramatic and cutting; it implies that he is going to do something... Well, bad. The, "if he...", line just ruins the whole flow of the piece, in my opinion.

I think it would have been more fitting in something other that this style; it seemed really random, as opposed to the "Did it really matter?", THAT opened it up. While the "if he..." just let everything crash to a world of "bwuh".

...

I think-er, I KNOW-I'm being way harsh. I know. ; I'm just an opinionated bitch, I guess, in that sense.

I really like it though-even if I can't see Sora in a villianous role, you still had me from start to finish. Much more than I expected. The pacing-how everything is set-up and all-is really good, just be careful with your style, is all.

Nicely done. _

- Noelle