The 'sweets' get kinda old really fast but besides that its ok for a 1 shot...

Dude,your story rocks so much!! can u make a sequel or sumthin'?

this is a cute story! very good! you dont usually see harry and hermione as a couple-

Definitely cliché. I'm most definitely not a fan of Harry/Hermione and the characters are incredibly OOC. It wasn't that bad, grammar and spelling wise... it was the plot. Of course being the avid Ron/Hermione and Harry/Ginny shipper that I am, I'm a little repulsed by the fact that anyone would write anything different. Anyway, I don't know what else to say... so, good day to you.