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| Renji Tyke 2008-07-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey, this is pretty good, once you get another chapter up, maybe it will work out. |
| Quentin 2007-07-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseOk...THAT'S creepy |
| animewatcher 2007-06-10 ch 1,  | abusenice starting point, i would like to read more of this |
| gunman 2007-06-08 ch 1, | abuseOkay, I'm confused. This story is marked 'Complete', but you've clearly stopped at least half-way, or even a third of the way through it. You don't explain how the bodies got all mangled and tossed everywhere, you don't explain how Shinji got into the restricted section where the Rei clones were being kept, you don't explain the power outage prior to this scene, or what happened afterwards. The spelling errors I could overlook as you seem to have been in a bit of a rush to write this. If you want I could take a wack at rewriting and maybe even finishing it for you. I myself am also writing a Shinji/DummyRei story. Write On! |
| ReisFriend 2007-06-07 ch 1, | abuseIf this was a one-shot, then why did you leave it unfinished? Because you are lazy? If you are, then why did you bother to write anything? |
| I Come Anon 2007-06-06 ch 1, | abuseToo bad you're lazy. You're not half bad at these morbid little one shot things. |
| Cant Namemyself 2007-06-06 ch 1, | abusedude! chill out! don't freakin hang yourself (asukas voice) WHY DIDN'T YOU BRING THIS OUT EARILER BAKA!>!>!!??!?!? (normal voice) i admit this is a great oneshot. |
| Bob 2007-06-06 ch 1, anon. | abuseheheh... "violence does solve everything"... keep going |
| dennisud 2007-06-06 ch 1, | abuseWell first yeah get it preread as it sure was rushed abit. now as for him falling for a dummy-plu AFTER seeing what he did? Doubtful It would take a chapter for him just to calm down and thnk out all he saw, He'd hate his father more after his fright at what Rei really is. The maybe after say 5-6 chapter could he try first to talk to Rei then if they were still around see the Dummy plug as more than aouless doll. dennisud |
| NamelessHeretic 2007-06-06 ch 1, | abuseo_O Creepy... nice. |