You know what Raven this fic is a pretty good indicator of your writing skills. You get a favorite.

Hmm showing some promise here I'll review chapter by chapter, just cos i can't read any further atm as my wonderful computer is refusing to load chapter 2 -_- There are a few grammar errors, but nothing too serious but i'm literally over the moon that you've got Bayleaf AND Cyndaquil on teh team! I love those two! (Cyndaquil/Quilava/Typhlosion being my fav line of pokes has nothing *ahem* to do with it..._

The punctuations still need a lot more work, question marks and exclamation marks are flying out where there really should be just full stops and commas. The story is engaging and although it's not really the best fighting action scenes I'd read, it was good enough to keep me reading. What really put me off was the punctuations and occasional grammar/wrong word mistakes, so if you'd improve on that this fic would take a huge turn for the better.

Signing out!

Another chapter, another nice job. Tsk, you made Raven seem like Sasuke on Naruto after he introduced what his goal was. Keep up the good work and update soon.

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Peace Out

I've read 3 chapters so far, and so far, I've got to say nice job. I like how both Ash and Misty have matured after the Sinnoh region. Now I'haven't read past chap 3 but I wonder if Dawn or Brock make an appearence in the story, guess I'll have to find out. Like this it's very realistic so keep it up.

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Nice story. Hope you continue soon. _

I'm working on one to if you want to check it out.

Well, your battle scenes are even better than mine. The describe what happens to the environment in addition to the actual Pokemon.

“Cyndaquil’s evolving?”

Dang it, I wish you'd posted after I completed chapter eight. Now I'm gonna look like I'm copying you. No, I didn't have Cyndaquil evolve, but another one of Ash's Basic stage Pokemon.

Your chapters aren't that long. My chapters are much longer. Chapter 2 alone was over six thousand words. But by comparison to your other chapters, and EM's, it is rather on the lengthy side, I guess.

Took you long enough to update (Although I'm not one to talk...).

I found this fanfic last night. Since you reviewed one of my fics (Seashells and Secrets), I figured I'd return the favor.

I like the battle scenes in this fic; they're well done. I also like the mystery and building suspence. Of course, I enjoy the AAML, too!

The story is kind of hard to follow, though. Sometimes it's hard to tell what's going on or who's talking. Also, it feels like there are way too many OCs. I'm sure you have your reasons for including them all, but it's very hard to keep track of who's who, especially when some OCs just appear briefly and are never seen again (though I'm sure they'll be seen again sometime in the future).

There are a fair amount of grammatcial errors, although the grammar isn't as poor as that seen in most stories on this website. It could use a little work, though.

Thanks again for reviewing my story. I'm enjoying this story and I hope this review was helpful.

Good chapter dude

Yeah, Emi's a hypocrite. Your battle scenes are pretty good, though it couldn't hurt to have a bit more visual description. I know what you mean when you say battle scenes are faster to write than dialogue. I get the same thing.

Oh, love triangles are so frustrating! Even though in fanfics you generally always know how it works out, it's too *searches for word* indirect of a form of shipping for me. It's also not worth it if the "vertex" of the love triangle doesn't even openly acknowledge the existence of said triangle. But everyone has his or her own individual style.

So far, so good. I'm liking this fic. Some of the chapters are just a tad short for my taste, but that's OK. I hope you update soon.

Hi,I'm Kefka. You might remember be from Espeon Master's fics. I might want to hahve an original character I made up to be put in this fic if that's kay

uh-oh! this doesn't sound good for ash! that battle scene was a good one. I have one question, what level was Ice blue? the sheer cold attack doesn't affect pokemon that are a higher level than the pokemon using them. But if ash's Pikachu can take out a golem, a marrowak, a machamp and an onix with one thunderbolt attack then it's ok, as this is a world where no rules apply.

Oof, I sense that the next chapter will be confusing with the 5 trainers and their many pokemon not to mention the two men. So be careful when you write the chapter so slow people like me wouldn't get confuzzled :D

Emi is fun. And is she arrogant? Fun anyway.

I didn't see the Team Galactic grunts calling Emi "little". I think you forgot to add that little part to girl... Anyways, it could be just me, but I had a hard time figuring out where they were. Not only Pikachu is missing - so is Azurill :D And also, I don't think I need to be told when a flashback starts and ends. The italics already mark that. Oh! And, when you jump between sceneries or characters who are elsewhere, you could divide with some thingers too.

Altogether, nice job! Keep up the good work :3

Here are my 5 questions. 1. What is this fanfic about? 2. What locations are being used for the fanfic? 3. When does it take place? 4. How old is everyone in the fanfic? 5. By the way, who all is in this fanfic? Be sure to let me know.