Ahah, what the hell - this is amazing!
I totally bookmark this one!

(Beautifully written, by the way; subtle characterization, funny humor, very poetic. Gotta love your metaphor.)

That's cute! I like the last line. And nice Odo poem, by the way.

- Green Peppers

...What the hell?

hmm interesting metaphor though the vague script of the story can be some-what misleading

What the hell is a Green, Scaly Chest Monster...?

Interesting little story. Nice way to dance around calling it Love or lust or what have you.

bahahahahahahahaha


lol

nice story

=D

Amazing. You seem to write in poetry rather than prose, and you manage to carry them both off hand in hand. I love it, don't let anyone tell you it's redundant. :)

(Though, you did have a few spelling mistakes... nothing major or too distracting.)

This was really funny, and I enjoyed it.

I don't get it...


OH! Is it envy? Or jealousy... However that's spelled... either way! Ooh yeah, I'm smart! Yay!

I'm sure I would have enjoyed it quite a bit more if I actually understood what you were talking about, but believe me, I still found it amusing. Bye bye!

Interesting. A tad redundant, repetitive and self repeating (all over again).
Could use a better punch line or conclusion.

Hagrid wouldn't know but the monster is effectively killed by seven, or more, years of marriage and a typical divorce attorney.

Persistent nagging, large weight gain, and "in laws" are also powerful weapons against the chest monster.

I LOVE THIS! It is hilarious! The Green Scaly Chest Monster... hahaha. lol.

God bless-

sunny tuesday

er...haha...Don't get me wrong, it's really funny but I don't think I really got it...the green Scaly Chest Monster is jelousy?

Funny, as always! Good job, BAGGE.

Very cute.