I enjoy reading the mobster lines because I say all of them out loud, with a very stereotypical New York mobster accent.

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"CRUCIO!" cried Voldemort but a shield appeared in front of Harry, the curse impacting it and Harry casually just moved over to the side

Since when is the torture curse, part of a set of three UNBLOCKABLE unforgivable curses, capable of being blocked by a shield? Harry may be Harry, but if you plan on destroying the accepted rules of a world, at least explain how Harry can do this, or please remove it if it was an error?

Yeah up to this point I was enjoying the story but it looks seems its just another of those stories I hate where the hero can never win. So I'm done with it.

well written story. but I wonder why you did'nt post it in T or K, when there is no more than kissing that also in the end.

many could get lucky like me to read it.

SO FREAKING AWESOME! i was surprised by the ending, as there was barely anything giving away the double persona.

THANK YOU AND KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK PLEASE! (_)

Good story, hilarious at times too!

This story has been added to the C2 Genius Harry!

nice

nice

Dude, Harry is constantly tea-bagging the ministry in the face!

pfff...hahahahahahahaha! That's just too funny. BUT WAIT! There's probably more...

LOVE IT!

ABOULUTLY LOVE IT! GREAT JOB SO FUNNY, I LOVE THE MAFIA!

off to the next chapter :D

nudist colony ;-)

This is billed as a Harry/Luna fic, or at least Luna is listed as a major character and Hermione is not, but I'm more than half-way in and I think I've seen Luna mentioned once in a passage about the previous timeline. Instead I see lots of Hermione and a little Blaise. WTF? I did not want to read yet another fuzzy bint bookworm story.

I hate it when sentences don't make sense because you've skipped words, added words, or just plain lost your train of thought in mid-sentence. Frankly, your writing skill sucks. You have a certain amount of creativity of the crack!fic type, but you shouldn't ever edit when you're high. And you shouldn't ever post without extensive editing.

This story gets only two stars out of five.

This story promises to be a funny parody of the back in time fic. Too bad you never edited out the last of the spelling and syntax errors. It really destroys a joke if one of the key words is spelled wrong. There are enough errors that I'm annoyed and distracted by them, but not so many that I feel I have to give up reading it, yet.