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| PrncsAelitaSchaeffer 2008-05-10 ch 5, | abuseIt's good but in the summary you said that XANA tried to stop them. In the story he did nothing. |
| FanFiction Writer 22 2007-07-19 ch 5, | abuseCool story sis keep it up. |
| Clevelandrocks 2007-07-05 ch 5, | abuseThat's so sweet... I especially love the detail Zell. you truly have a flair for making stories wonderfully! I hope you make more of Jeremie and Aelita's love! its adorable!! |
| AussieUlrich 2007-06-09 ch 1, | abuseGood begining. Wonder what Xana is planning. |
| Tastes of Strawberries 2007-06-09 ch 1, | abuseGood start! You may want to tone it down with the character descriptions- since this is fanfiction, your audience already knows who they are. Try devoting your description to the scenery, or to objects, but don't be too long-winded. You've done a nice job capturing typical show dialogue. |