Great work Leks! Things are picking up again with your story and descriptions. Your experimentation of David's thoughts if placed in a situation of ultimate despair are very convincing. I also liked how you included the red rose symbolism of Monica that I had hoped Spielberg could have used from Aldiss's story (I think the wind chime thing was used instead). Its also nice to see the nanny mecha again.

Oh boy I waited so long for this and it was well worth it. Please continue for I am sitting on the edge of my chair anticipating what will become of Teddy and David.

I remember about a month ago reading the first chapter to this story and eagerly awaited its continuation. Then this website crashed for a very long long time. Argh! This is definitely one of the best A.I. fanfics I've read thus far! I like how you write your followup paragraphs after every quote line, describing each characters feelings. Your facial descriptions of David and Monica are really fine tuned. I can just picture Haley Joel Osment making those same faces if this were part of the movie. I am having some trouble, however, believing that Monica really got hit by a truck. I realize that you said that the chapter was not going to tie into the story but will it eventually in future chapters? Excellent work!

This is one of the best stories I've read. I keep checking everyday to see if you've added anything. Having Monica get hit by a truck was classic. I could just picture David's look seeing his mommy dead. I think she deserved it.

I just read chapter six...UGH!!! Oh, *yuck*! Maybe I'm just a tad too squeamish, but I dunno...bones flying out of the skin? Ehhhh...

Thanks one chapter to feel disgust for the charactes invovled and not a tear shed.

Jeez, talk about a radical pivot since I was last in here! Whew! (Henry mops his clammy brow, eats a handful of Prozac, and waits feverishly for Chapter Eight):D

Leks your breaking my heart... But I will keep reading.

Oh. My. God! A truck! Holy Geez! That was completely unexpected! I love this! It really keeps you on your toes. Keep on writing, LB, I want to find out if... HOW David can get back to how he once belonged. I really want to read chapter 7. In the meantime, ladies and gentlemen, DON'T PLAY IN THE STREET! ;-P

Very cool, very cool. It's interesting to see all the different tangents the characters from this film are being taken. Got more? BTW - nice artwork on your site, as well.

Leks very nice start to your narritive hope that you have a great ending to it. You have done a great job playing havok with my emotions agian. I was just starting to think about the film without choking up, but now... keep it up I will be reading often.

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This just keeps getting better. I am loving the daily updates. I can't wait until tomorrow evening for part V. Keep on going! I'll look forward to seeing this one on Exposure ;-)

Wow! A completely unexpected twist! Beutifully written Leks. I can't wait to see what happens next: will the story rake a completely different route from the movie? Will Monica disregard it and abandon her son anyway? I need MORE! ::whines childishly, ala Pixie::

Wow! It just keeps getting better. Thanks for the great story LB! Keep it coming (wherever you decide to go with this story, I'll read it eagerly!)

Brilliantly written Leks! I find it slightly creepy, though, how all of the stories about Monica on fanfiction.net have her hurting herself. Do all authors subconsciously hate her so much? Anyway this story is very well written. IMHO, it captures Monica's distressed emotions much better than my story did (read "Monica", currently in the Miscellaneous Movies category.) If this is just the prologue, then I can't wait for the next chapter!