Nice. This was so sweet. I felt like it was a little bit rushed though...Could have spread it out a little more, though...

I loved the beginning :) Very sweet.I wish the story was longer reminded me of Romeo and Juliet :D

Well done!

sweet i loved the ending

Very sweet

that was so cute! luvd it!

it was average...but it was way too short for me...i'm a writer, i write books all the time...i guess im just not into stories so short like this.

but it was ok, i hope to see more.

Relapse and attempted suicide...NICE. how about spreading it out/Making it longer? That'll be cool.

Short but sweet next time make it longer though

I liked it, but I also agree it needed to be spread out more. It reminded me of Romeo & Juliet, only with a happy ending... kind of melodramatic, but good job. )

that was very choppy, no offense. it has potential, if you spread it out a little bit more. you are good person at coming up with ideas. however you just need to...

spread it out. seriously.

WOW...relapse, attempted suicide, coming out of the relapse...a bit overdramatic if you ask me, but it somehow fit. nice job. :)