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| AlElricFan1001 2008-08-19 ch 1,  | abusedon't stop i love this story! |
| Atemu'sLotus 2008-04-16 ch 5, | abusePoor Ed. I feel sorry for him that he is in such heat and with automail!! But thank you for continuing with the story! Please keep writing!! |
| Harryswoman 2008-04-16 ch 5, | abusethis is good! write more very soon! |
| Niki-Uni 2008-04-13 ch 5, | abusewow...you update fast...inspired huh?...anyways I wonder what Ed's reaction will be when he meets Jabba...he isn't a pretty guy after all...haha...I can't wait to see his face...haha |
| Ranchi Blade 2008-04-13 ch 4, anon. | abusereally like the story, but I would like the chapters to get longer, please |
| skywalker05 2008-04-12 ch 4, | abuseI like how you write Ed's angry dialogue toward Mustang, and a Star Wars/FMA crossover is an intriguing idea. However, the matter of the crossover is a bit shaky. How exactly do the Amestrians fit into the Star Wars universe? If they're simply another planet, why doesn't the Empire control them and why aren't they technologically advanced? If one can get past the gimmicky crossover, this is a fun concept. You write dialogue pretty well. In general your prose doesn't quite flow right, but the only thing you can do to improve that is to read more and to read over what you've written a few times to be sure sentences aren't overlong. That's interesting that you make the point about both Luke and Ed losing limbs. I bet they could have an interesting conversation about their violent pasts. |
| Niki-Uni 2008-04-12 ch 4, | abuse2 hours instead of 12 is great...I bet Ed really appreciate that...haha...anyways sounds very interesting...I can't wait to see what happens :) |
| xXHeatherMustangXx 2008-04-12 ch 4, | abuseThese are awfully short chapters, but seeing as I get FMA/SW xovers in my head from time to time, I find this very interesting. can't wait for the next chapter. |
| Katty008 2008-02-09 ch 2, | abuse"It was starting to irritate Ed at how happy this guy was." I totally agree with Ed, overly happy people get on my nerves especially when I'm in a bad mood because I can't figure out how they can be so dang happy. |
| Koshilo 2007-10-08 ch 3, anon. | abuseThis is a really good story. I only just started reading it. I want more! WAHH! Anyways, you and your brother are really good at writing FMA fanfics. I wish I could, but every time I start writing a story, I just never seem to finish. Really good story! Keep it up! |
| AdamTheAnt 2007-09-13 ch 1, | abuseActually...i'm too scared to read this fic. I can't imagine a fanfiction about starwars...I'm sure this is a good fic because I read other fic made by you and it was good! But...i can't, lol... |
| shinigami109 2007-08-11 ch 3, | abuseCOOL!! plz update soon! |
| Shadewolf7 2007-07-10 ch 3, | abuseChewie speaks Wookie. Easy enough to remember, once you know it. This is either going to be good or awkward, and I'm hoping for the former. Good luck! |
| miss-edward-elric 2007-07-01 ch 3, | abuseyay! i love your story!keep going! it's awsome and i cant wait to read more! you'r realy good at writing... i on the otherhand am not...*cry...sob*... keep writing! i love EDWARD ELRIC the Fullmetal Alchemist ♥ miss EDWARD ELRIC |
| Harryswoman 2007-06-27 ch 3, | abusewow! this is good! write more very soon! |