Good, but i think you put slayer in a few too many times. Also, I think that Miroku shouldn't be all 'mylove, dear,love' because that just isn't him. But that is my suggestion. Otherwise, it was an ecellent lemon! Da Who gives you 8 stars!

Very lustful. I loved it!

Seductive angle is the perfect name for you.You are my FAVE writer so far and I mean that from the botom of my heart! You are so good and I thought I had A Freaky side to me! You sure have my beat! Brovo keep wrghting PLEASE. Finsh this story son or please start a new. Wow you had every thing I was looking for DETAIL AND ROMANCE! Thumbs up!

Sincerly
Miroku's Girl Sango93

Seductive angle is the perfect name for you.You are my FAVE writer so far and I mean that from the botom of my heart! You are so good and I thought I had A Freaky side to me! You sure have my beat! Brovo keep wrghting PLEASE. Finsh this story son or please start a new. Wow you had every thing I was looking for DETAIL AND ROMANCE! Thumbs up!

Sincerly
Miroku's Girl Sango93

Ya SO many spelling errors!

but good other wise

um... good, but the raiting should most defently by M

hey dat was supposed 2 b m rated but hu cares?

nice ** scene!:D

Very good... but this is a lemon. The rating's too low; it needs to be an 'M'. Other than that; AWESOME!!