cute

This was soo nice!! I loved it :D
and I think you stoped just in the rigth place, leave us wondering ^^

this was rather very sudden in some parts, the emotions weren't established well enough for readers to feel the intensity of the consummation of marriage or kaoru's fear or kenshin's feelings about what's to happen. but then again, this being a drabble containing less than a thousand words, this must have been a challenge in itself.

good luck with writing more :) it was a good read

>_< i cant take it anymore~! kya! love this one! kya!

This was very good! I like it alot. I think that it's good without a lemon, but, putting one in wouldn't ruin it. I enjoyed reading this.

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I like this a lot. Very in-character, and your descriptions are just...wow, I'm envious ^_^. Pretty good stuff.

haha. that was really cute. :D

Wow O.O very good ><
it is so cute very lovely I like it ^^

I can think of only one word that can describe this: perfect. You wrote just enough to give us an idea of what was going on, but the characters were definitely the main focus of this lime. Basically, I loved it!

you surely know how to begin it perfectly..it's just so enchanting..have you experienced this story that you made??..haha..:)

This is such a sweet moment to start the rest of their lives. Will we see more of their beginnings? It doesn't seem explicit but it was more and endearing to read. Thanks for the read until next time.

Loved it! Well done!

The eloquence with which you write is simply amazing - the tenderness and array of emotions conveyed through simple yet elegant dialogue and descriptions...

"He felt her intentions through their joined lips and knew that his control would break...if his heart was easily betrayed by his eyes, then her foil was her soft, unknowingly sensuous mouth."

I thought that part was especially beautiful.

EXCELLENT job on this oneshot :) I hope to be able to read another one of your works soon!

*Giggles insanely* Very cute, nice and limey, which fits your name, and hehehe.

Ok, being the pervert that I am- but, no, mostly because this was beautifully written and was in character and sweet- ... a whole lemon would be nice?

I'm gonna shut up now because I feel like a perv. *Waves*