Wow, this is really good. Definitely continue it!

Interesting beginning... it sounds good. Do you think you could go into a little more detail about Peter or the others? Just a suggestion.

Dearie- who is Ann Raldini? It goes downhill from there.

Hmm...interesting concept, but it feels a little rushed. I really do like your basic concept however, of a bi-racial girl winding up on a Southern Plantation during the time of the Revolutionary war...

that was pretty good! needs a little help in the punctuation and everything.. what happens though? that was a really REALLY short chapter 1!

yay! another Ann Rinaldi fic! ooh, please, please, please hurry up with the next part! you confused me with the indian names and the white names...you should stick to either calling them by their indian name or their white name. anyways, i'm really enjoying it! Dorthey Star

Ok I don't quite get the title, but I like, it please add to it.

a good start, i'm anxious to see where you take this story. one comment, however, is that i feel the prologue told your readers a lot that we would have liked to see. for example, the blossoming of peter and her friendship, and when peter tells her he is a spy, would be a good way to let us get to know these two characters better and to add some valuable drama. but anyway, i'll look forward to the next chapter!

I like it